Black Poetry : Penalty Of Birth

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  1. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "p u s h!"

    "p u s h!"


    screeches of cries and screams
    drafted infant soldiers unfold
    vocal cords in protest.


    propelled from the closest place
    equivalent to the serenity of
    " Eden's Garden "
    no awakening from a bite
    of Eve's apple.
    irrefutable 3rd eye knowledge from
    20/20 premonition visions of
    powerful nations with
    distorted priorities to
    voluntarily inflict world suffering
    all in the name of " Peace!"
    printable currency, not enough to
    quench famine, stamp out poverty
    or cure man made diseases.
    instigaters of hatred and
    accepters of injustices.

    "p u s h!"

    "p u s h!"


    screeches of cries and screams
    innocent souls unfold vocal cords in
    protest expulsion from sacred womb


    foot soldiers to march
    on turbulent grounds
    fighting neighborhood wars
    absent trenches; opened targets.
    mirrored enemies and
    street pharmacists
    prescribe crack dreams
    that crumble family structure
    un-nurturing mothers; disclaiming fathers
    shorten days; l e n g t h y nights
    contemplating suitable reasons
    d e s p e r a t e
    to
    make
    sense out of
    sense less ness.

    "p u s h!"

    "p u s h!"


    screeches of cries and screams
    intuitive newborns unfold vocal cords
    protesting involuntary entrance to
    a
    cruel sickiety.




    Scribeaboutit! It helps.
    CCBSKYN :heart:



    Copyright © 2002cju
     
  2. story

    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...ok i confess i had to read this piece twice...it's deep...

    i feel the first stanza more so than the second but it is still well put together as a whole...

    WOW!
     
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    you had to be sippin on a little somn in the moonlight by the candle light when you scribed this here. this imagery is simply to deep to have simply come off the top of ones head.
    tyght flow poet
     
  4. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Story,
    I had to read it a few times myself.
    The way it poured out from me...
    I felt as if I was rambling.
    Thanks for reading me.
    BTW: Neat name. :)

    Shaz,
    Would you believe it did?
    My mental was sip'n on questions
    I've always wanted to know
    the answers to...
    Why do they stuggle not to be born?
    That is, what they're doing... isn't it?
    Why do they cry after being born?
    Hmmm :confused:


    Thanks for the love.
    It's returned..bigtime!


    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u was rambling deep within coz dis be deeper then one's
    thoughts and da reality of wooooweeee!! let me hush!
     
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    AS YOU OFTEN SAY PREACH, SPEAK SPEAK ON IT!

    PROPHETIC, PHENOMENAL,FANTASTIC!
    YOU ARE SO GIFTED! MY SPIRIT GETS
    FIRED UP EVERY TIME I READ YOU!
    THANKS FOR SHARING!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
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    Wow!!! I can feel the strength and depth of your imagery. I look forward to sleeping on it and rereading it several times. I may finally understand it, more likely not. But I love the flow, thank you.
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dang let me have a lil bit of that mental juice you drankin on ova there..... More Fiya mon







    One
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $Rich$,
    I'm pleased you were able to feel my rambling. :)

    Sherykah,
    LOL! You think? :)

    Smilin,
    I'm glad your enjoyed the flow. :)

    MsB,
    You are a joy. :)

    Zorb,
    Drink on girl....I ain't stingy :)




    Thanks for the love yall
    It's returned...Bigtime!


    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    coco.


    ...i was diggin' on this one bigtime!! :)

    i love it when poetry gives me things to think
    about... thank you for inspiring my thought
    processes this heah beautiful thursday mornin'!

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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