Black Poetry : Pen Ramble....

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It’s like a remix…deep in a maze
    As I rise up
    Here the screams
    Wish it was a dream
    My pen runs dry
    And my thoughts wonder
    In the gravel pits
    Running crazy pullin back
    Can’t let it go
    But cant explain it

    Fire explode and the depth of it plays like a lost song
    Trying to fix the mix and shake it down
    But the ink seems to be gone
    Gone
    Just…..gone
    Thoughts float and just fly by
    Nothing seems to be in order
    Running
    ………… Running
    Time is leaving
    As the sun falls and the moon comes…
    Line still unfinished
    A night mare
    Hit hard where the words go
    Can i get a Pen call....
    I dunno...
    The concept…huh a concept
    Structure…..ish
    I don’t know
    Pen still empty
    And the thoughts just come and go
    As the ramble comes
    Like a gravel pit diggin cant find….well
    Mind block
    Writers block
    Thoughts wipe
    Hurt trying and trying
    Can’t seem to get it out….
    Release and relax……
    Relax and release
    Power of the pen drop
    Head spin ramble
    All mix up trying to pull through
    But the ……
    Dang got to start all over again…
    It wont come……here we go
    Up a hill once more…
    Check the flow can’t seem to flow ish
    Trying to par-take in a mix that wont flow
    Check the …..
    down back in the gravel pit
    Can seem to get the fire lit
    Thoughts moving ish
    And the mountain sits in the middle
    Diddle de diddle doe
    Stumbling on the ground as I
    Go back back and forth forth
    Oh my.....pen dry
    ...Just dry
    Two steppin and tangle pull
    Shuffling across the paper
    And wondering
    But its still blank
    What the……throwing a fit…
    Relax and release
    Release and relax
    My pen is dry…..
    And I cant write myself out this one….. :bawling:

    (C) 2004
    blackangel thang....​
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    get a new one a wet one and write ya heart out
    coz u can make da move in a groove ya rambling
    will get u through .....i like dis here .....it was tasty
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you...QQ fo dat new pen..happy you enjoyed gave me a smile
    now let me go find my flow shoot...smh
    thanks again for the support on my dry pen Rich!!!

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    :teach: That pen musta
    been a magic one,
    cause the ink is
    still flowing!!!!!

    Tyte drop Sis!!!
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awww thanks sis for the kind words always....but my pen had no magic just trying to get out this dry spell..... :angel1:
     
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    **** this poem was amazing. Loved the concept of it. Writers block is something i've been struggling with for the past few years now. I know exactly how you feel with this piece. So much stuff there is to write about that it just cant come out the way you want it too. Like the way you put this together. Flowed real nice, which made it easy to read. Let me stop rambling lol


    one luv
     
  7. gempis

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    Sister, you captured every one of those swirling thoughts and feelings you become wrapped up in when writer's block is upon you. Masterful flow.
     
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    Seems like you just flowed yourself right out of it to me. We can all relate to this piece.
     
  9. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mind~$oul...lol thank you for your reply and love on dis dry pen work happy you see the concept not happy you had to go through it...your scribes be tight....i enjoy reading you....

    gempis..thanks for the love on dis happy you enjoyed it

    watzinaname..thanks for the support on dis...

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    the pen may not always have the answer but it sure does lay it all out :)
     
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