Quiet Poetry Lounge : peaceful me

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by toylin, Aug 10, 2004.

  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    one of these days i'm gonna run
    leaving sorrow far behind
    deep in the dust
    chasing after rainbows
    in the sky
    one of these days
    i'm taking off my mask
    shaking loose my spirit
    one misconception at a time
    until then
    here i sit
    crying out my eyes
    drowning in my tears
    held captive by my fears
    i wanna leave this hateful place
    but i'm lonely on my own
    don't have the strength to fight
    wondering if i'll ever be
    all right
    the sun sets over me
    as i lay me down to sleep
    dreaming dreams of paradise
    hoping they'll remember me
    one of these days
    i'm gonna feel so free
    can't do it by myself
    maybe God will send some help
    'cause only Him
    can comfort me
    as i wait for the dawn
    of a brand new day
    upon my knees i fall to pray
    asking will today will the moment come
    where i'll acheive my goal
    and become free peaceful little me
     
  2. MrBlak

    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deep....and well composed Toylin. Sounds like you were feeling trapped when you wrote this.
     
  3. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You have NO idea. Thankfully, I no longer harbor those feelings.. at least to that extreme.
     
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    You really really took me there with you - I was feelin every line. Wow. So glad you're no longer in that place. I've been somewhere similar, so I'm feelin you all the way. Keep droppin em.
     
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    That freedom will come, you have to keep thinking that. I know it's hard, believe me. I could feel the emotion in these words.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    love da creation on dis here
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    posed well..enjoyed this read..flow head on!!!!!!
     
  8. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :love: Tank coo! :love:
     
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    FINDLOVEINME Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Been there, and I am glad that those days are over for you also. Very good piece.
     
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    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So I am.. and I'm glad that you're also no longer in that place. It's not a very good place to be.
     
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