Black Poetry : Patiently Waiting

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  1. pdouble27

    pdouble27 New Member MEMBER

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    I find myself dreaming outloud to her
    telling her my aspirations, wondering if she's reading between the lines
    or if she's even listening~

    See my first real encounter with her was at a tender age, a time when I
    was battling internally~

    I couldn't appreciate all that she had to offer~

    Now I look back at a squandered oppurtunity, wondering what could have
    become of us, if I'ld only embraced her~

    I promised myself the next time she showed up, I wouldn't let her out my
    grasp~

    Reality was, next time she showed up she was like a thief in the night~

    She snuck in and snatched what was so heavily guarded and took off~

    Now I'm on the search for her and the sacredness she's taken from me~

    I'm making a plea to her~

    Love I'm here finally ready for what you have to offer~

    You can have my heart for the rest of my history, if you promise to love
    it like you, love it like love~
     
  2. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is so beautiful
    It touched my heart
    very beautiful piece
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    sweet smooth release tyte write ....
     
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    Ireadastory Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Isn't it great to be in love with the thought of love? I liked this piece. Flow on!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bringing out some treasures Rich. Telling love you're ready for everything it has to offer, loved the concept and the write.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This touches me as well. I sure hope you get her back. :hearts2:
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome pdouble
    You seem to have come to us with a "heavy" heart...we mend all hearts, so just relax and let it flow.
    awesome piece poet, ...now let's go on a hunt for your other half :horse:
     
  8. 1Greaterthan~I

    1Greaterthan~I Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Heartwrenching
    and
    So so beautiful :grouphug:
     
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