Black Poetry : Path

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  1. soblessed

    soblessed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A man
    Who claims
    Claims to attempt
    Attempt to change
    To try but to fail
    Failing as a man
    A husband
    A companion
    Not willing to make amends
    Bound by his lust
    Tied to desire

    A father
    Not being a father
    A role model
    Teaching his sons
    Lack of
    Self control
    Lack of
    Respect for women
    Thinking
    Thinking working is enough
    A enough to sustain

    A husband
    A huband that does not reverence
    Reverence his union
    His wife
    Their family
    Nor their love
    Leaving her lonely
    To fulfill his wants
    Not taking her into consideration
    No sign
    Of remorse

    A women
    Wanting more
    Getting less then she deserves
    Tired of settling
    Settling for
    What she can get
    Knowing there has to be more
    More then this
    This life she lives
    Doubtful
    Unhappy

    A mother
    Not knowing how to tell her children
    Mommy must leave Daddy
    Not knowing how to raise boys into men
    Knowing she cannot
    No one to show her daughters
    What to look for in a man
    A mother who must set an example
    Of what not to put up with
    A mother who must be strong
    Strong for her children

    A wife
    Who tried her hardest
    But it is never enough
    Always going without
    Without
    Attention
    Affection
    A sign there is some love
    Some interest
    Some desire
    Admiration

    The children
    The poor children
    Will they think it was something they done
    Blame themselves
    Think
    Daddy does not love
    What path will they choose
    From the path I am left to choose
    They will be torn
    Confused
    I am sorry but this is the path I must choose
     
  2. cursed heart

    cursed heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a very heartfelt piece:terrific:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep and well felt .....left me stung !
     
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    first im glad your alive thanks for that. and second you could call, and third dont ever leave me in the balance. ok back to my commenting love the emotion that was felt in this piece sis. so full of emotion love how you put it down flo on sis. and oh drop me a im will ya. let me know how things turn out ok. ok.
     
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    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was -very- well written. A profound feel lingers through the whole piece. It kept dragging me on, reading intently.

    What pain...

    Thank you.

    ~Ikoro
     
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