Black Poetry : Passion Mark

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  1. gottaluvher143

    gottaluvher143 Member MEMBER

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    This is my first post on hear, tell me what you think.


    Passion Mark

    In the heat of loves passion
    your tongue leaves loves mark
    that turns my caramel colored complexion
    to a tone so deep and dark

    In the heat of your madness
    your hand bruises my face
    and leaves a passion mark on my soul
    that "I'm sorry" can not erase
     
  2. tzevi1278

    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome to the site, this was a short but powerful scribe. keep inkin em
    poet

    Lyr1c
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!!

    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome to the house of love,peace & respect
    welcome from above as i bless this some love
    tyte drop look to read more of u and do share
    giving love to other poet's as love is given
    :hi: :terrific: :hi:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome to destee.com
    very nice spicy scribe i
    enjoyed looking for more...

    Please join us in our voice chat as well
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    Peace
    Angel
     
  5. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh girl, this one pulled me back..

    small, with such a powerful blow...i mean dang

    all the while, keeping it heartfelt, and catching


    nice scribe
    peace out
    :cool:
     
  6. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi and welcome to our home...that's now your's too
    You're right about not erasing this maddness, because the minute you do, ...it will re-appear.
    nice drop of the pen, thanks for sharing
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The first four lines, I thought was heading one way, but then the next four, wow, took me right into the center of that painful blow. This hit like a bullseye. Welcome to destee, hope to read more from you.
     
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    Welcome
    Nice flow I felt those blows too
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome poet.
    WOW... I 'm excited over your first offering, it dramatically gives the world a peep at your talent. Please continue to showcase your ability here.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :welldone:

    Sure makes me wanna read more from ya, this one does. Welcome!!!!!!!!! :coffee:
     
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