Quiet Poetry Lounge : passing

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by toylin, May 18, 2004.

  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    someday this shall pass
    this wound in my soul
    will close
    and the sound of your footsteps
    leaving me
    will fade
    what don't kill you
    make you strong
    for so long I've been told
    but no one shares
    this feeling that the world
    is cold
    someday this shall pass
    and the words I'm sorry
    will mean something again
    when I can look into your eyes
    and not see the darkness
    I mistook for love
    someday this shall pass
    when I won't sleep again
    and my body is warmed
    by your kiss
    someday
    someway
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow !!!!
    awesome flowing inside da passing
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You've again captured us into this melancholy feeling, well done.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a heartfelt piece...I felf it as well.
    just keep the pen in motion, I like your style.
     
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    I'll try to write something happier next time........
     
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    toylin,
    skillfully written, it captivated and involved me in the mood.....
    making me say i'll be glad when something is done to make this pass....
    it's too blue
    add some yellow
    make it green
    your writing skillz
    are
    WAY TOO MEAN.....

    Peace and Blessings....
     
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    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are very talented Toylin. You express the feelings of loss very well in this poem.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed a gift of flow from the expression deep within
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Toylin, we can't write about happy times, if we just aren't feeling it. The mood was melancholy and you captured it well. Peace.
     
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    Yes Sister!

    Oneday your heart
    will be whole again!!!

    Emotional heartfelt scribe!!!!

    Keep it flowing Sis!
     
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