Black Poetry : Pain Soup

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He hasn't stopped
    consuming this
    unsavory broth
    of a lover's chaos
    but his heart won't
    let him stop eating

    Sipping the same
    soup warmed over
    night after night
    promises him
    a bowl full
    of dissolution

    There's pain in a dish
    that somehow turned
    ridiculous pudding
    ...with only the
    midnight moon
    to spoon him




    (c) 2001 SOULOFASISTA
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the way you flipped those words tells me that person is in a world of hurt :) tyght.

    blak
     
  3. Nia Maishani

    Nia Maishani Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We are right --->here<---

    Now this is a cool piece. Such a common situation. You present it with such creative eloquence. Looking forward to reading more.
     
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    *thinking*

    "Pain soup". Lovelorn.
    That's thoughtful.
    LOVE the ending.
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak

    Thanks for the read papi!


    N2
     
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    Nia

    Glad you enjoyed the read! Just as you, I too, am looking forward to reading more of your proses!

    N2
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nia

    A second read - eh?

    Thanks sistah!
     
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    tyght **** disbe all i can do is shake my ballhead
    as i fly above ringing in new year love
     
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