Black Poetry : Pain in the Land of the Free

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  1. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Can you see the bloody rivers...
    Can you feel your black woman shiver...
    Or the coldness of the the rain...
    Can you see the lostness...
    In the eyes of your black man.
    Its the "Pain in the Land of the Free."
    The earth that was toiled by our ancestry...

    Media playing rotation of hypocracy...
    Embedding its sin.... In our mentality...
    Children with no parenting...
    Except society and some good old TV...
    Now molding their activity...
    Its the "Pain in the Land of the Free"
    The increase in human kinds greed....

    Its all stemmed from a tree...
    Paper turned into money...
    And to think... the purpose of this land...
    was to practice our own beliefs... freely...
    yet our constitution is based on christianity...
    What about the other trillion living next to me...
    Its the "Pain in the Land of the Free"
    It is what we have came to be...

    Steeling from our loved ones...
    Children are just as high and drugged up...
    Now trying to be grown...
    Just to get a tax break...
    Assets you have to own...
    Could've worked for 25 years
    Who cares...
    You bare no benefits hears...
    Retirement isn't for another 30 years
    It's the "Pain the Land of the Free"
    It is our duty... for living in this society....

    Shackled in bondage...
    Disrespected and taken advantage...
    Placed in position to our disadvantage...
    Placing our lives in someone elses hand to manage...
    When they are serving our lives on a silver platter...
    Nevermind the casualties...
    "How far can i get up that ladder?"
    We were not just divided due to color...
    It was also based on cheddar
    But we are so consumed with ourselves....
    We refused to join together...
    No faith that UNITY will make things better....
    Its the "Pain in the Land of the Free"
    Its is the United States... The Nation of our society.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u know dis was da bomb
    da pain in our land of da free
    lady u keep talking i'm listening at ya
    flow on sistah Queen
     
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    nice drop
    feelin the flow...Peace...Angel
     
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    Tell the truth and flow on...precisely put.
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    EXTREMELY WELL DONE!

    Excellent piece here, excellent read!
    Thanks for sharing ,work that pen scribe!

    Blessings On Your House!
     
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    Incredibly insightful piece...
    you definitely address
    some very pressing societal issues here
    masterful scribe
     
  7. shaneak

    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks Everyone!!!

    Thanks for the love!!! Sometimes.. i just don't know how the words lay out. I be thinking one thing and writing another... I wasn't sure i hit all points but atleast i got some :d I guess its the flowetry of the pen... :)
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    not knowing the outcome
    of a piece to me... is pure poetry.

    just my poetic opinion and
    I'm definitely feelin' yours

    Nice to read you again.

    madd sistahly love
    Coco :heart:
     
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    The poetic mind works in mysterious ways, & this was a mental masterpiece.

    I like what you're workin' out of.
     
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    shaneak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Why Thank you

    You all can be so endearing... and Coco, you are both so right!!! Atleast it turned out good...
    Positivemind... the membrane is currently fighting to be released... i haven't experience literary creativity in a while.. in my opinion.. glad its still their somewhere though :)
     
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