Black Poetry : Out Of Commission

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  1. Intrepid

    Intrepid Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am out of commission
    trying to get things straight

    Out of commission
    cause things seem to be falling apart
    bills piling up
    money not coming in
    marriage (if thats what you want to call it ) at an all time low

    Out of commission
    but still on my knees
    praying for guidance
    asking for forgiveness
    and trying to hang on

    Out of commission
    cause there are still things and people I can't seem to shake
    and you are one of them

    Trying to shake off
    the desire for you
    to hold me
    caress me
    kiss me
    and love me
    I gotta shake you off.....
    Ummm well.....
    Do I really ????? :thinking:

    Out of commission
    with so many things
    misplaced
    displaced
    or just plain out of place

    I'm the one out of place
    cause what I need is no longer
    a constant part of my space

    Out of commission
    and lost without
    my friend
    my confidane
    my lover

    Trying to find substitutes for what I know is real
    with no one comparing to you or how I feel

    Out of commission
    and barely keeping my head above water
    but doing so for those I gave life to
    continuely asking
    praying and
    begging for
    strength
    encouragement
    understanding
    and love

    Out of commission
    but so very thankful that I am awake to see
    the sun rise and set
    hear the laughter of my babies
    feel the rain hit my skin
    and start the cycle of life all over again
    even if it is without you
    my love.​
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    now you see this right here i can relate to deep
    because i know it so well and just out of commission.
     
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    Out of commission, but keeping things going for the children and yourself, even if you're without that significant other. It's a struggle but you can. I hear ya. Do flow on.
     
  4. Intrepid

    Intrepid Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you $$RICH$$ and Watzinaname for the support on this flow.
    It's been a while since I surfaced I had brain and heart freeze...LOL
     
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    re: Out

    This poem is so real. A poem we all can relate to. Excellent Job. :bomb:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    enjoyed this flow....

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    You're just "momentarily" ...out of commission, so use those moments to do some "inner-soul" searching. Savior these moments and re-commission your life.
    I like your flow
     
  8. Intrepid

    Intrepid Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Thank you Thank you all
    I am back in commission....lol
    Just moving sort of slow.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome sista ...................
     
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