Black Poetry : Out of Breath

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by nadea, Apr 19, 2001.

  1. nadea

    nadea Active Member MEMBER

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    Running through dark alleys
    chasing allies
    Tripping over words with
    multiple meanings
    wondering which message
    is being conveyed
    meanwhile turning allies
    into adversarys
    Running through never
    ending tunnels
    Stumbling into manholes
    not knowing whether to
    climb out or not
    Wondering if allies turned
    adversarys will be
    at the top with
    out - stretched hands
    hands stretched - out
    trying to help my ***
    or trying to hurt my ***
    running, tripping,
    running, stumbling
    Out of breath
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    HUMMMMM! VERY WELL WRITTEN POET!
     
  3. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    i'm with $$RICH$$ ...
    very well written

    had me in the alleys
    peeking up and down manholes
    wondering who's hand to hold

    *breathing hard*

    loving this

    :heart:

    Destee
     
  4. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Me 2

    Feelin each verse. You're not the only one. Scribe on sis. Keep this alive. You be 2 real.
    Desert Storm
     
  5. Twofish

    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    inhale...exhale

    and lemme read that 1 again...i diggz this!
     
  6. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice flow....

    comes from this scribe!
    Well done, and keep it comin'!
     
  7. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    brilliant !

    This is no doubt a classic piece of yours -
    it's sooo visual and it sounds really personal,
    as if any of us could stumble on mixed messages,
    and run in circles trying to decide who's who.

    To say " I feel this " would be an understatement.
     
  8. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice flow.

    welcome poet!

    one love,blak
     
  9. Tantrum

    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love the flow poet
    This is was a nice drop
    Much Love
     
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