Black Poetry : Our Relationship (UNFINISHED)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by THEONE, May 4, 2004.

  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What would I do if I didnt have you
    Days wouldnt be the same
    Nights would never get through

    Could I walk the same, Talke the same
    Would my life have any meaning
    Would I die a foolish man
    Forever hopeless, but dreaming

    What would I do if I didnt know your name
    Could I awake in the morning or even tale the difference
    Between Joy and Pain

    Could I indulge in love
    If I didn't know the true meaning
    Are would I only paint perfect pictures
    Of you, and keep dreaming

    What would I do if I couldn't talk to you
    Who would I call my friend
    Who would I tell my story too

    Would I go out of my mind from lack of attention
    Would I always wanna speak out
    Only to keep it to myself, afraid no one will listen

    What road would I take,if I didnt have your direction
    Would I walk the straight and narrow
    Or through lifes battle field without any protection....................................................
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it's so wonderful...

    when you finally find...

    Completion...


    Love the way you sculpted this...

    work of art...

    feeling your vibe...flow on poet...
     
  3. PurpleMoons

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    This is wonderful!
    It makes me ponder
    on what I would do
    if I did'nt have
    God.
    Beautiful piece!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tight
    enjoyed this
    ....Angel
     
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    this was awesome and the complete warmth one fines
    tyte drop
     
  6. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thnks all,
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yea, how another person can become a part of your soul, you can't imagine life without them, you expressed this so well.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...what a one'ness...to have and feel that kind of love for someone. This was breathless and I got much joy reading it, thanks...
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thnks, THnks
     
  10. blaqquebeauty

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    "Could I walk the same, Talk the same
    Would my life have any meaning
    Would I die a foolish man
    Forever hopeless, but dreaming"
    this was a wonderful piece. it makes me think of the one i let get away. whoever has you writing like this, don't let her go. thank you for sharing.
     
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