Black Poetry : Our house

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Cindy, Aug 17, 2006.

  1. Cindy

    Cindy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He bought me a house
    We made it a home
    A real home
    We didn't bring hateful and cruel
    When we moved in here

    There are roses
    And beautiful flowers
    Grown here in love
    In our garden
    In a vase on the coffee table

    There are wind chimes
    Ringing with the sounds of cathedral bells
    Trickling brooks
    And the laughter of fairies
    In chorus just outside

    We are content
    Having passed through the abyss
    Coming out together
    Only just slightly
    Singed

    We were tested by time
    By mistrust
    By insolence
    And lies
    But we survived

    And the house
    Oh, the house is beautiful
    Like us
    Although we are much older
    Than it

    Our end was our beginning
    I believe
    All the torment and trials
    Brought us here
    Together

    Still standing
    Look at us STILL standing
    How proud I am of you
    And thankful that we two
    Stand as one, now

    To share the benefits
    Of ‘we’
    Being better friends and lovers
    Than when we started
    We have grown, after all

    As the garden grows
    Suddenly
    I have a green thumb
    Everything planted here
    Has bloomed

    No one would have imaged
    That you would buy us a house
    Much less us live together again
    Oh, the wonders
    Of growing old

    I thank God for you
    For your smile and laughter
    Oh, how you have lit my days
    Now never afraid
    Wrapped in your embrace

    In our house
     
  2. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    you are very blessed

    you have something most people don't
    longevity in love
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    truely is wonderful .....
     
  4. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Umm Hmm...

    Cindy my dear,

    Still lovely as ever!

    :welldone:

    Always Peace/
    GQ
     
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    BEAUTIFFUL is all I can say.
     
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    that was a pretty decent piece poet
    it really didnt ryhme but it had a good meaning
    7/10
    uno
     
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    unlike some i know poetry dosent have to rhym..
    well leave the nurseryrhymes to the kids..
    great drop!:welldone:
     
  8. SmoovVerbiage

    SmoovVerbiage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cindy it's...

    been awhile since I've taken in your flow

    How wonderfully nice it sounds
    to share a house with someone
    you love and create memories
    in it


    sweet piece:)


    SmoovV
    aka Coco
     
  9. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cindy...finding this was like discovering an oasis in the wilderness
    It is absolutely wonderful to read you again!
    ...and the beauty of this piece
    was tantilizing to my poetic senses
    the descriptiveness of the scenes
    and the flawless way they played out
    what I love the most...is that

    ...you artfully taught us that a house in regard to love
    is not a "physical" place...you may share a house
    but the true house...is the "one heart, mind, and soul"
    two...that became one

    I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT

    I hope that you have been well !
    It was wonderful reading you again...truly.

    Sage
     
  10. phenomenalwoman

    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excellent writing, perfect in its format. Some are under the misconception that poetry has to has to ryhme this is not the case. You told your story effectively and let the audience grow with you, though I don't give ratings know this is excellent.
     
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