Quiet Poetry Lounge : Orobouros

gogounited

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If we could remember all that we knew,
the whole of our human evolution.
Surely then we could attempt to renew,
the process of our next revolution.

If you are what you eat,
and the head eats the tail,
eat only that which you admire.
If it lets blood or dies to give life
Then temper it first in the fire.

Full moon is upon us and dreams can come true,
for dreamers whose dreams don't expire,
While the snake winds up and down the length
of the dead and the djed-pillar spire.
 
If we knew what we know
Would any of this be
Or, would we stress that there be change
Based on our ability

If we saw through hesitation
That some would stump and hurt the whole
Would we cut away the bad
Or, allow the rest to heal their soul

Yesterday prepared the lesson
For ALL of our concerns
It is for us to embrace our blessings
And condition our heart…that we might learn

gogounited, eh? impressed.
 
Very impressed with the rhythmic meters, the clear form. Iambic pentameter indeed!

Thank you, sir!

It's nice enough, but all of my poems sound the same because this is the only format that I know, the iambic pentameter you speak of. I don't know what that is, but you sure make it sound important, lol.

Wish I could kinda break out of it, not that I don't like it, but that ALL of my poems adhere to this same format.

I'm going to try something new and see how that rolls off.

:)
 

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