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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by gogounited, Sep 13, 2011.

  1. gogounited

    gogounited Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If we could remember all that we knew,
    the whole of our human evolution.
    Surely then we could attempt to renew,
    the process of our next revolution.

    If you are what you eat,
    and the head eats the tail,
    eat only that which you admire.
    If it lets blood or dies to give life
    Then temper it first in the fire.

    Full moon is upon us and dreams can come true,
    for dreamers whose dreams don't expire,
    While the snake winds up and down the length
    of the dead and the djed-pillar spire.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tru dat......we can only be ourselves who we are
    every soul holds it own means tonight fullmoon
    is only signs to let go and renew self ........
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If we knew what we know
    Would any of this be
    Or, would we stress that there be change
    Based on our ability

    If we saw through hesitation
    That some would stump and hurt the whole
    Would we cut away the bad
    Or, allow the rest to heal their soul

    Yesterday prepared the lesson
    For ALL of our concerns
    It is for us to embrace our blessings
    And condition our heart…that we might learn

    gogounited, eh? impressed.
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    Very impressed with the rhythmic meters, the clear form. Iambic pentameter indeed!
     
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    gogounited Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you, sir!

    It's nice enough, but all of my poems sound the same because this is the only format that I know, the iambic pentameter you speak of. I don't know what that is, but you sure make it sound important, lol.

    Wish I could kinda break out of it, not that I don't like it, but that ALL of my poems adhere to this same format.

    I'm going to try something new and see how that rolls off.

    :)