Black Poetry : opium den

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by redlady, Aug 24, 2002.

  1. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    black hair cascading down her back
    she stands in the entrance
    with one long manicured fingernail
    she beckons him to enter
    "your turn"
    she says as the smoke billows around her

    he enters the den
    eager to taste
    the thick black paste
    that will transport him to a place
    opening up his mind
    allowing him to find
    keys and sounds and signs

    the sweet aroma fills his lungs to capacity
    he loses sense of time
    tenacity
    it passes too quickly
    reality

    he sees long black hair
    out the corner of his eye
    as the cold air from outside
    rudely jolts his senses

    he realizes he must leave this place
    it is unhealthy for him to yearn
    but he will stop tomorrow
    one more day to hide his sorrow
    and the sweet music he has learned
    to connect two words
    "your turn"
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    and as he enter back again
    looking for da signs a friend
    he realized he was mesmerize
    to a perfection of mask
    inside da mind he see her face
    the long silky coal black hair
    wave she standz not far
    beckon to da call
    knees weak try not to fall
    so once again he rush
    for the hills where his
    inner heart feels
    so i deal the truth
    upon u and two
    words connect again
    yo turn friend !
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brutha $$RICH$$...i see your flight is smooth sailing...above the turbulent skies, you fly. CONTINUE your flight, my Brutha.:)

    Redlady...
    the den is thick
    with stimuli for the senses
    as incense smoke
    warf
    high above the
    carnage
    that hover above the
    would be seduction
    that calls to me
    as i strain to see
    the river that connnects
    you to me
    and all we could be
    in the give and take
    turns of you and me
    when you say
    YOUR TURN.

    THANK YOU.:)
     
  4. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    RICH!!! As usual I am feeling your flow. You have a way of connecting things and seeing the picture I am trying to paint.

    Baller: Now see? Um, see? That's what I'm talking about! (see the big grin on my face right now!) It is me that should be saying THANK YOU most definitely!
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Smooth flow poet, you painted quite a picture
    Loved the read
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you flowed this picture well...
    -7:spinstar:
     
  7. redlady

    redlady Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank seeing the picture in my words...wildflower and shaz!
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey red

    you got down on this one here




    One
     
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    redlady!!! i'm feeling you and enjoying this panoramic view you are painting.
     
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    red.


    ...i hate to sound redundant! :)

    but i gotta give you props on the fantastic
    imagery created by this piece. i enjoyed
    the read... immense-ly. thank you for sharin'.

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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