Black Poetry : Open Fields & Streams

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  1. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Galloping through fields of golden wheat
    basking in the late summer's heat
    Reigning in at water's edge
    mere feet from the the towering mountain ledge

    Rising cliffs of dirt and clay
    keep the rushing winds at bay
    Water's surface like glass a shimmer
    sings of sirens's song of come hither

    Upon dismounting I steady your stead
    experiencing my growing animalistic need
    Setting the horses aside to graze
    observing this scene in a heavenly daze

    Valley outstretched in summer green
    trees dotted laboriously about the scene
    Mirror blue lake at valley's end
    fed by falls as the water descends

    High in the sky the sun shines bright
    making comfort an unbearable fight
    stripping down to nature's suit
    we prepare ourselves for a cool pursuit

    Diving into the deep cool blue
    surfacing to gaze lustily at you
    Easing in with the utmost care
    you cause my heart to flutter with despair

    Swimming so slowly up to you
    encircling your body in this bed of blue
    Never before has anyone seen
    a picture of beauty so pure and clean

    Drawing your form ever closer to me
    arousing the animal yearning to be
    Lifting as breast scrape against my chest
    feeling your heat rise from your nest

    Legs wrap around while lowering you down
    impaling you deeply upon my full crown
    Animal lust washes us through
    as deeper I thrust myself into you

    Our crescent comes with deep surprise
    exploding our bodies from deep inside
    Exquisite pleasure comes in joyous spasms
    entwining our bodies in simultaneous orgasm

    Hours have passed with the sands of time
    ending this day of your's and mine
    Easing down upon the shore
    we feast on a picnic of lust and more

    With feelings of unity we prepare to leave
    this dreamlike setting nature did weave
    I help you mount your steed on high
    as off we set on the evening ride

    Gliding along at a leisurely walk
    enjoying the closeness of lover's talk
    Across the path fleet a herd of deer
    flushed from cover by coming too near

    Towards a farm we start to ride
    as the sun from the sky does slide
    All my surroundings fade to black
    while I seem to be falling back

    I open my eyes to the light of dawn
    knowing from whence my soul is drawn
    Looking about at the ice cold gray
    seeing the bars of another day

    Into reality again I awake
    wishing my freedom I could take
    My dreams allow my thoughts to see
    how I think my life should be


    When life lowers to hues of blue
    my mind projects an image of you
    I focus upon the beauty of kinship
    then close my eyes for a joyful trip

    Caramelpython
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    galloping from a height
    toward the dawn
    feeling the heat
    of the passion increase
    mentality reaching
    a higher desire
    as your flow
    takes me
    higher and higher
    the poetic warmth
    mmmm
    taking me there
    love to vibe off this bliss
    loving this:)
    Peace
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ty Blue always good to recieve the love.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was very awesomely pose'd
    ya pen is red hot flow on brutha
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes ya pen...
    this was well
    posed...:angel1:
     
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    Yes, indeed.

    I can dig it.

    Write on, brother.
     
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    World Class...

    I must say...you are truly a visionary when it comes to writing...
    and you def' have a skill for drawing your reader in to the setting...
    this had such beauty and the passion was completely off the richtor,
    I was smitten with this piece from beginning to end...
    it was as smooth as your name states...caramel
    and this journey?...mmm, mmm, mmm

    :spinstar::spinstar::spinstar:Phenomenal:spinstar::spinstar::spinstar:
     
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    I am inclined to agree wit sista sage...you pain your poetic portrait oh so well my brotha...lawd have mercy this was :hot:
     
  9. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$ Ty for the comments, you do your thing on here and Im always watching your smooth.

    blkangel my sister you know I have always been behind your work.

    PositiveMindset Ty for the view and the respect.

    angelicsage Ty my sister you have always blessed me with your kind remarks it is always appreciated.

    triniti424 Ty Ty Ty I will try to keep up to the sites standards...LOL
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    And of COURSE this was anotha favorite :)
     
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