Khasm13 : open eyes sees the sky

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    surely this cannot be love
    i say this
    cause of the fluxuating currents
    than run concurrently through my 2 atriums
    then my 2 ventricles
    these feelings are not mystical in nature
    rooted in reality
    is the agonizing formality saying that
    this cannot be love

    the way that we both bicker
    when we should really both snicker
    at lifes daily dilemmas
    come on now
    all of us are sinners
    so don’t tell me that you are a beginner
    when we are both neck and neck
    just out of sheer respect
    you should have step to me with respect
    the past has tainted my intellect
    telling me that
    this cannot be love

    2 years ago i stepped to you
    true blue
    with my intentions
    even though there was a nagging
    sagging in your packing slip
    that i choose not to mention
    i did this for my reasons
    in the past i traveled the full extension
    of exploration
    maybe that is the explanation
    karmas cruel kindness making a return visit
    for all the times i wasn’t serious
    but acted like it, making others delirious
    staking out dorms, crashing through doors
    while i was leaving the pillow warm
    breaking bread with whores
    early in the morn
    fresh for a new adventure
    steadily on the prowl like a doberman pincher
    not a pretty picture painted from a past prison
    the ugliness of the human heart(this is me we are talking about)
    prompted my decision
    to make an incision
    and cut out the dead in me
    so that i could eventually
    find a friend in me
    but all of this you know
    and still you choose to blow
    it off
    not thinking that maybe you
    should do
    the same
    too much time has past for
    wait hold up baby, let me explain
    another willowy whisper in the wind
    which washes through me as I wince
    saying that
    this cannot be love

    from day one i said
    communication is the key
    without it we are nothing
    you still choose to sit with
    venom and malice
    instead of spitting it out
    so we both could sip from a
    calmly cool chalice
    of understanding
    this i believe is not too demanding
    for you to
    just be real and tell me what you feel
    i wish your mind could have been
    my main course meal
    but now its time to chill
    cause
    this was never love
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    ladies please take no offense
    just tales from the heart
     
  3. Moses the Poet

    Moses the Poet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Peace to you, brotha

    This flowed well. There were some really effective lines in it:

    "karmas cruel kindness making a return visit
    for all the times i wasn’t serious
    but acted like it, making others delirious
    staking out dorms, crashing through doors
    while i was leaving the pillow warm
    breaking bread with whores
    early in the morn
    fresh for a new adventure
    steadily on the prowl like a doberman pincher
    not a pretty picture painted from a past prison
    the ugliness of the human heart(this is me we are talking about)
    prompted my decision
    to make an incision
    and cut out the dead in me
    so that i could eventually
    find a friend in me"


    I hear you, loud and clear.
    It aches..... puts me in mind of when I was numb to true love and jaded by having seen and experienced too much.

    A strong and honest scribing.

    Andrew
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt ..............speak of heart tales
    we all have a few to tell a story to flow
     
  5. MissPoetik

    MissPoetik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    open eyes

    no offense taken... i can feel you on that one. if it aint love, then it just aint love...
     
  6. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Big Ups to keeping it REAL!

    NEVER,EVER,EVER...APOLOGIZE FOR SPEAKING TRUTH!
    OWN YOUR PAST AND CREATE YOUR FUTURE AND ALWAYS KEEP IT REAL...CAUSE THAT IS WHAT MAKES YOUR READERS FEEL!

    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!:toast:
     
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    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    keep bringing this flow my brutha!!
     
  8. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    thanks my peeps
    this scribing help me release
    some dark emotions
    from the belly of the beast

    more to come...
     
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    i loved it. yeah i was feeling that. absolute truth bad brotha turned real, good one.
     
  10. StarGoddess

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    this does not offend.....

    ...rather it opens womens eyes to the fact that not all men are incapable of leaving the past behind and finally grow out of the peter pan syndrome....

    tyte *** piece khasm....

    **searching for neverland**
    :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss: :kiss:
     
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