Black Poetry : OOH POET,YOU'VE GOT THE GUTS

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  1. MacGeo

    MacGeo Active Member MEMBER

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    O POET YOU'VE GOT THE GUTS

    Like a priest he sits;
    Ready to sermon my mind;
    And curious am i;
    Waiting for the news;

    But little i know it's heartbreaking;
    And the pain in it i know not;
    Cuz a polite poison it is;
    Which sends me morally dead;

    He could be true;
    But how am i sure?
    So an inquest i make;
    Lest my rest'n sleep it takes;

    If it's hatred or love, i ponder;
    But the quetion remains unanswered;
    OOh the way the words flow off the lips
    words intended for advice and comfort;

    But the pain i can't bear;
    Cuz like a bullet it hit my heart;
    for i can't believe its me;
    And now is the time to act i swear;

    From the Doctor,the truth i sort to know;
    Even from my girls'n friends;
    Cuz they know me more and deeper;
    But they say it different;

    And now a crazy lie i know he made;
    Now my heart burns in anger and rage;
    Ooh but love he means,i guess;
    But man thank you for a thing;

    Cuz i know care and concent you show;
    Though it's a crazy walk on a wild side;
    By the powers that beseach me;
    Both by the moons and the heaven.
    I know not why...........................
     
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    Mysterious and yet ingenious...

    You pull the reader in, but you don't let them really know what the bad news is...that is of course a writer's perogative, I still enjoyed the read, cause it gave me pause to conjure up my own scenarios that might fit...do yo thang!

    Blessings on Your House!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaaaa! mental mind flow of wonderment
    tyte scribe
     
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    i enjoyed this read...makes ya think
     
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    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I L-O-V-E this piece....... Has the reader on a mental rollercoaster.....
     
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    Got me wonderin...
     
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    If you never experienced the rain or the pain.. then you can't understand the let down. It isn't a permanant place. It is a come up with grace, restoring of stance and place. In a world full of pain. Rain only falls on those who stand outside. Those who have been on the other side. Of love. To love and lose is like a ship sailing without a captain. Like a sermon without a meaning. Never meant to bring you down.. but up in the truth.

    Very nice and reflective MAC.. I like it.
     
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    unique...and i love it...
     
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    I like.
     
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    I love the conviction of our species
    I love wisdom from on high
    I'd love to re-write poetry
    If it could only inspire...

    Great work!
     
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