Black Poetry : only heaven

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by skrybe7, Jun 16, 2003.

  1. skrybe7

    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    grays overlay the welkin light spray
    the end of day at hand
    sun sets clouds ablaze
    and that's the way of forever
    days in flux
    this crazy juxtaposing
    of things that mean so much
    no touch like heaven rosing over
    evening
    morning
    from darkness to light
    motion the only warning
    seasons turn by laws universal
    within the cosmic spin
    no notable reversals
    always live no rehersals
    it comes and goes
    and all the ways of forever
    only heaven knows

    (c)06/03/Michael
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes indeed only heaven knows the rotation of it
    it's not man made
    nice flow fo sho....
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is nice...a lot different from some of the stuff i'm acustomed to seeing on here...i like it

    keep it up
     
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    :toast; Nice flow sky! you carry me onto sumthin I to have never read before:) I like this though :thumbup:
     
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    Hey Skrybe, :wave:

    I like this!! Great flow and imagery!!

    :thanks: for sharing it with us!!

    All my best and much peace to you!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
  6. skrybe7

    skrybe7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx fam!
     
  7. SkinDeep

    SkinDeep Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great scribe!
     
  8. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I noticed that one of the previous comments remarked that, this poem was different from many of the others that are posted within the destee community, this is true. But I said this to say, that this form of poetry is what I am accustomed to and "I love it".

    This is great work! I was envisioning the sunset that you described in the beginning as one of the most beautiful of many and how delicately and well crafted the words were placed in this poem, this is a phenomenal piece. I love a poet who "trusts" the reader to comprehend what is being communicated. Beautiful Work!
     
  9. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    skrybe, sweetie, you are the only person I know who can pack such emotion in 50 words or less!!!

    Cheers to you boo!!! :toast:

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    definitely outstanding work :toast:
     
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