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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by arthur1210, Apr 8, 2008.

  1. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm in a situation
    There’s intrigue & anticipation
    I'm beguiled by what could begin
    Yet, there’s cause for hesitation
    'Cause in our conversations
    She tells me she only a friend
    Me, having complications
    Her, having obligations
    I know that my chances are slim
    Yet, her subtle flirtation
    Has founded my fixation
    Although she's only a friend

    My initial inclinations
    The pursuit of relations
    Because her smile is under my skin
    Having no expectations
    Merely appreciation
    For a body that can make a man sin
    She has triggered activation
    Of such pleasant sensations
    Blowing my mind like the wind
    The factors in the formulation
    Of tremendous fascination
    Yet, she is only a friend

    Steady strengthening stimulation
    Intensifying infatuation
    I can no longer try to pretend
    Style & sophistication
    In the right combination
    Causing my resistance to bend
    I feel I'm in preparation
    Through improper motivation
    Spending energy I should not spend
    There is such frustration
    From futile fascination
    For she remains only a friend
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let me first say that your rhyme scheme was awesome. It's beyond disappointing when you see someone as a possible mate, and they just see you as a friend, and you expressed those feelings so very well poet, wow.
     
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    arthur1210:
    First let me say it is so nice to read you again.
    I agree with sista watz the rhyme scheme was
    all that. And I am so feeling you on your flo....
    Kinda got my own "Just a Friend" thang going on.
    Nice drop indeed.

    Much Luv
     
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    Great flow
    I like how you expressed each complication and situation of being only a friend
     
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    wow

    great write....

    things we have all felt at one time or another...

    look on the bright side.... sometimes friendship is great, and it leave the door open .....

    blesses to ya... hope to read more from ya...

    one
     
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    Wow did you take a peek into my life and write the flip side of my coin. This was a awesome write my brother. here's my verision

    I'm in a sticky situation
    There’s intrigue & anticipation
    I'm beguiled by what could begin
    Yet, there’s cause for hesitation
    'Cause in our conversations
    It come to both our attention
    That we're not in the right postion
    Me, having complications
    He, having obligations
    Yet, his subtle flirtation
    Has founded my fixation
    My initial inclinations
    The pursuit of relations
    Having no set expectations
    But enjoying all the attention
    And reveling in the appreciation
    Noone knows how it will come to completion
    But we've long past the stage of activation
    And moved into such pleasant sensations
    So many factors in the formulation
    Of tremendous outstanding fascination
    Steady strengthening stimulation
    Intensifying overwhelming infatuation
    He's got just the right combination
    Of potential and ambition
    Causing my resistance to bend
    I feel I'm in preparation
    Through improper motivation
    Spending energy I should not spend
    There is suble frustration
    From futile fascination
    Floating in the deep end now
    Just wondeing how oh how
    Will this all turn out in the end
    Hopefully I'll still have my friend
     
  7. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like you version poet... your truly a sticky situation, Glad you're feeling me
     
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    oh baby you...

    got what I need. but, you say he's just a friend. but you say he's just a friend. this poem moves and causes an influx of -ions to merge into a song i've sang many times before. like Chris rock said, "Don't you hate it when you slip into the friend zone?!" However the anticipation makes the relation that much better. Let her know how you feel when you're ready. Dam good write!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow....this piece took me there and the way u displayed it was awesome
     
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    flo on Arthur very creative..........
     
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