Black Poetry : Only 1 tear fell...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by NittyGrit, Dec 8, 2005.

  1. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Slow dancing alone
    w/ a gigolo moon
    while tattle-tale stars
    sneak and peak in my room

    whispering breezes
    tickle the mood
    as lyrics and melodies
    inspire a groove

    traces of lonliness
    creep through my window
    disturbing the ambiance
    of soft candle glow

    tears of the sky
    splash softly and hiss
    then slide down the silhouettes
    that hide in darkness

    the bosom of my bed
    caresses my head
    w/ sympathetic pillows
    and an affectionate spread

    the walls lend support
    with their tentative ears
    and sing accopella echos
    of each word that they hear

    silence never sounded so lonesome
    when she was around
    i saw laughter in her eyes
    despite the blues in her frown

    the darkness wasn't so heavy
    and never last so long
    the union of our bodies
    birthed many a dawn

    now there's nothing to comfort me
    but silky wayward winds
    fleeting incense smoke
    and this emotional pen

    NittyGritt (c) 2005
     
  2. nevar

    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i love the flow of your pen flow on poet.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I could feel the loneliness in this piece, but at the same time, I appreciated the smooth rhythm and descriptive verse. Well written scribe.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hey now this was butta smooth ya know !
     
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    Nitty laying it down
    The eys are now wide
    Nice flow poet
     
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    Whoa.

    I lay it down and give it up for this one. A powerful lament.

    ~Ikoro
     
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