Black Poetry : One Thought

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Defiantson, Mar 25, 2006.

  1. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One Thought

    I am the manifestation
    Of hypocritical situations
    With mental philosophies
    That contemplates
    Your average way of thinking

    I am the son
    Of a 1000 mother whores
    Whose only hope
    In life
    Was to give birth
    To her only god given son

    I am the evolution
    Of positive solutions
    Not counterfeited
    By the revolution
    We now call restitution

    I am the pollution
    Of political illusions
    Whose illusive view
    On the government
    Relies on Bush’s prostitutions

    I am that
    Ever lasting taste in mouth
    When you bite
    Into a bitter lime
    Cause it reminds you of bad times

    I am your fear,
    Your sadness,
    And your love
    Cause when you think of me you see
    The strongest man you have ever met

    Who am I, I am nothing special
    I am just a metaphoric vision
    Caused by our decisions
    And yet you still wonder
    Who I am

    To be honest,
    I am just the rhyme
    Of this poem
    With only one thought
    On my mind

    By: Manuel Hager
    Copyright©2006
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  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man i really like the stanza in this piece
    the whole joint was tyte , you are the many reason
    in often season to life , spring out and keep flowing
     
  3. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yo thanks Rich, that means a lot to me. You keep writing that fire.

    Mannie
     
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    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are.......a great poet. Gracious words, and infinitive depth.:)
     
  5. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you so much, you have no idea how much this really means to me. I look forward of readying some of your work too....
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excellent work!

    Wish I'd written it.. oh well.
     
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    thatgirl74 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :dance:
    Your flow is one that makes me want to dance. I feel a rythmic flow in your word well done.I must continue to check you out....


    Smooches!!
     
  8. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    <fades in>

    An incredible pice of poetry you have crafted here. Loved the metre and the rhyme and the way it just flowed constant and sure as waves along the seashore. Extremely well written!

    <fades out>
     
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    i love, love it. wow defiantson we must collab sometimes if ye dont mind. i think i asked that before and i dont remember your response. good piece truly phenomenal. well until next time love keep them flo's coming.:ilu: :flowers: :spinn:
     
  10. Defiantson

    Defiantson Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks all, I am nothing more then just a poet trying to make it out there. I am working on my cd right now and maybe one day I'll be a feature in one of your cities. So far I featured in San Antonio, Dallas, Lawton Oklahoma yes there is poetry in Oklahoma, and soon in Austin, TX. Well hit up my site and stay tuned.

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