Black Poetry : One Overlooked

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  1. Poetic Pride

    Poetic Pride Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There's a sistah with her head lying on the ground...
    having no shelter, no family, no clothes to call her own
    except for the one shoe that reminds her of home, but
    many walk pass her without taking a moment to question
    the one shoe that is gone...
    You overlook this sistah, but I stop to question to discover
    Misses is a product of rape.
    The night she left her dead mama's house from the whole
    world she tried to escape.
    From her house she made a right, went further down and made
    a left at the light and from there a car rode up and snatched her
    from the remorse that sent her on a traffic search...
    She didn't find herself in a drughouse, but in the front room
    of a rapist's shack;
    With her mother's death on her mind, she didn't fight back.
    She just screamed: "Rape me dammit..you're wasting my time!"
    So, will you continue to be a passerby?
     
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    innerbeauty Member MEMBER

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    I never thought about it like that, i like the output you gave on this situation.

    Everything is not as it seems
     
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    nabraska Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That's a deep thought and piece. Is it a true story?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwwwwwwwwww!! deep mental way to bring it
    flow on whoaaaaaaaaaa!
     
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    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reply to Poetic Pride

    Poetic Pride, Your story provokes my thoughts toward the humans nature
    I think in today’s world, the answer to your question would bring displeasure
    But I will tell you what I would do; I would practice the ancient art of chivalry
    I’d knock, like I was selling jewelry, then make the rapist drink my artillery

    Great poem you have made
    Now go and seize a great day

    Please show me some of your love
    Today read and reply to my thread
    " Dear Alpha Male, please help me, signed the slave from torment land"
    Please tell me about my skills, tell me if their weak
    or show nuff real----------Thank You

    If you read and replied once!
    Do it again, kick up a notch!----------Thank you
     
  6. Poetic Pride

    Poetic Pride Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This piece

    in this piece I didn't know where exactly I was going with it...I wrote it at work (Krispy Kreme) on a cashier receipt and I was just thinking deep about people we pass by in this world. You never know their situation...you know, not everyone that is homeless is a drug addict or even choose to be homeless. When I completed this piece I thought that it was a little too extreme, but there's no such thing. Thanks for your replies.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome....... as these sweet lovin reply's flow
    let me see u hit some of them up wit some love back
    this how we live and grow as poet's here so
    give a little and get more all about love sharing
    just a small REMINDER. peace :deal:
     
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    FINDLOVEINME Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THIS IS SO DEEP AND VERY VERY SAD, I CAN TRULY RELATE.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Noticing everything that is wrong, but not taking the time to ask how or why....This was a deeply crafted piece, well written.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    we are all our brother's and sister's keeper
    on through the cracks is one to many
    although most of us fail to see it

    Thought provoking peace...

    Flow on...poet
     
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