Black Poetry : One of Those Days

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  1. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One of those days
    One of those things
    A state of affairs beyond your control
    And despite what's right
    Plus your efforts to fight
    Moments don't go as you'd hope they'd go

    She's close to you now
    You barely know how
    Her approach was so subtle and slow
    Arousal, her objective
    And, she'll darn sure get it
    As she reaches to touch you and it grows

    You cannot avoid her
    You cannot ignore her
    Situations put you near her everyday
    But, you have a woman
    All and all, a good one
    Thus you've done your utmost to maintain

    But, daily her lips tease you
    Hints of way she can please you
    Casually speaking of games she likes to play
    Because flesh can be weak
    From such words she speaks
    You've been caught in the moments of this day

    Now you're together, alone
    You are away from home
    Prepared to experience what she's created in your mind
    Softly, her lips kiss you
    She seems ready to give you
    Each pleasure she'd insinuated you'd find

    Will you be as a man is prone?
    Despite what you have at home
    Will you be caught up in this bind?
    Risking things you treasure
    For mere moments of pleasure
    Yet, still so challenging to decline
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I loved how you layed out this particular piece and how it capture that moment of indecision.
     
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    Wow, the times we have been faced with "one of those days" syndrome...and the what if's that always follow :qqb004:
     
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    This is a great piece Bro Arthur (tell the Brother to do the right thing...LOL)!
     
  5. arthur1210

    arthur1210 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This a challenge I have failed and succeeded... and success, I must admit, feels a whole lot better in the end

    Thanks for the feedback and the love

    Arthur1210
     
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    When you have someone at home, and you find yourself tempted, best to put as much space between you and that other as possible. You took us all into that moment, poet, very well.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    keep dat ink running ya on fire this was outstanding here
     
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