Black Poetry : OnE oF DeM tHoUgHtS.....!!!!

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  1. BlatinaPoet4u

    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wrote this last year when i was a junior in high school. My whole junior year had been depressing so i used to write poems in my daily journal and i decided to share this one wit the family becuz i've moved on.........
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    Watch me paste my smile on , securely over my frown.
    Watch me tape the "lost" sign on
    for my soul that can't be found.
    Watch me fake that it's all okay, that nothing's going wrong.
    Watch me lie right to your face,
    watch me sing my fake-happy song.

    See me crumble when I'm alone, to a pile on the floor.
    See the pain I hide away
    safely behind locked doors.
    See the tears and mascara stains, that leave the ugly trace.
    See me now, see through it all,
    see the pain across my face.

    Understand where I'm coming from, care about my past.
    Understand why it hangs around,
    why the nightmares always last.
    Understand that it's all a lie, how I push away like I do.
    Understand that I don't want that,
    understand that I want you.

    Notice how I hide my feelings, locked tightly in a chest.
    Notice how I always laugh
    with the real pain and tears repressed.
    Notice how I silently scream, just hoping that you'll see.
    Notice all the signs I give,
    notice you, notice me.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    how i deeply felt you and saw the deepness of feelings
    from this heart felt flow and happy you moved on way past
    this to a new high ....I believe in you !
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    standing ovation nothing further to say:hearts1:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    How I felt the ache in this piece that you posed so well. I think some people forget how painful being a teen can be. Well written poet.
     
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    while...heartwrenching and overflowing with emotion
    I must make note that you have a lot of talent
    and this piece is very well written
    great imagery and flow...
    I loved it...
    I felt it...

    ~ I applaud it
     
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    Lloyd Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That is why i call a gift.Such a pain describe in a very good way!
     
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    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh, this is so good!!!
    Enough said.
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sista we here for you
    This was hott
    We notice you
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes indeed this one is still felt and surely we see
     
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    BlatinaPoet4u Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man i love my Destee Family, sumtymes i feel as if i love ya'll more than i do my biological family!!! Thanks for all the love and words of encouragement!!!:bellydance:
     
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