Black Poetry : one foot outside reality

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by hi-wa, Feb 20, 2002.

  1. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i stepped outside of reality this morning
    and saw a napkin blowing in the wind
    so simple-
    wind at its back
    on no particular track of life
    barely in its folded form bent in the middle
    to maintain a shape
    a gust took it farther
    i didn't bother to pick it up
    and **** up its lifecycle
    or recycle it because of
    a green triangle on the side of a trash can/
    just let it blow
    its mojo was a wigwam of movements
    groovements congruent to
    the morning that made me jealous
    cause i can't move like that
    then it disappeared in the mirage of street
    and city/ it's a pity i gotta step back inside
    and go to work
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi-wa...

    Enjoyable, peaceful, vivid flow!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
  3. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GA_Boi.


    we need to talk...
    ...'cause i can tell you got **** on your
    mind. but! otha than dat... i liked your
    "steppin' outside ya self" flow...
    (now do some love stuff... please??) :D

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well now ya see what's out dare!
    nice flow of twist
     
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