Black Poetry : One Day Can...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Jun 10, 2003.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i posted this in another forum, but i wanted to get some feedback on it in this forum too. so here it is, it's the chorus to one of my songs...tell me what u think!




    one day can make your life complete
    one day can make you feel so weak
    one day can turn your life around
    one day can make you loose love i should know
    and one day can bring you so much sorrow
    one day can bring you so much pain
    and you will wonder when you gain
    from your life
    i should know
    i've been there
    before...
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    u know i loved dis piece here
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    One day...wow .....your scribe never lies b/c I feel you :) TYTE PIECE!!!!!
     
  4. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yep rich i know u loved it,lol:)

    awwww thanks alot swtT!!:)
     
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    aqueenpassing Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice

    "Well I really like it" (smile)

    AqueenPassing
    :wave:
     
  6. Sierra

    Sierra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi, :wave:

    Very nice!!

    ~Sierra~:heart:
     
  7. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks aqueenpassing and sierra:)