Black Poetry : on top of luv

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  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    on top of luv

    im tryin to kill
    sitting on top of love
    strandling it like it was u
    tryin to kill
    face to face
    looking str8 into its eyez
    like it was u
    asking y
    like it was u
    asking it
    y it deserted me
    y it disappeared on me
    never returning
    showing its full presence
    to me
    im on top of love
    sitting on top ready to kill
    im running down these questions
    waiting fo its best answer
    to the y's and the when's
    maybe it'll make me feel better
    maybe love's life dont really have to end
    i want to kno
    where was love
    when i was hating my daddy
    or where when i was alone
    alone
    all alone- mentally
    y wasnt u there
    love?
    answer my questions before u leave me again...
    y u aint stick it out like a tru friend
    where were u when i creid all those nights
    y u wasnt there next to me
    holdin me tight
    y love
    y
    y am i sitting on top of u
    ready for u to die
    im ready to kill
    somin
    and its gonna be u
    but is it really somin i want to do
    if my need for u
    is as strong as my thots r tru
    as strong as my need fo knowledge
    y do i want u dead if i miss u so mich in my life
    could i kill u if all i want is u
    but do i really miss u if i dont remeber when the last time u came threw
    when the last i had a piece of
    love?
    huh.. tell me
    before u die
    im sitting on top of love
    strandling u
    thinking that if i did kill
    u
    maybe
    it be easier
    maybe
    id be free
    maybe
    i will
    free of any of these feelings of desire, want, and need
    for
    love
    u
    im sitting on top of love
    contiplating murder
    looking in ur eyes
    mezmorized but wat all u can do
    dam
    if only love wasnt in me
    then maybe
    jus maybe
    maybe
    i could attempt to kill u
    im sitting on love
    contiplating murder......
    contiplating u......​
     
  2. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aiight pa so I have the opportunity to be the first to hit you up with love. This joint was indeed of the freakin' meters. Blessings babyboi. Keep that fiyah coming.
     
  3. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is an awesome piece...a work of art, sometimes I wish I could kill love and I'm sure we all do at one time or another.
     
  4. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sorry but ima gurl...lol. but thanks for the love anyways.....
    thanks to u to queenswana
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    str8 sweet tyte flow lovin it
     
  6. Eric Mitchell

    Eric Mitchell Active Member MEMBER

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    Very nice. Wonder what love did to you.
     
  7. 7thPoet

    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my sista, this piece made me sad
    and i guess good poetry is supposed to do that sometimes
    mission accomplished... :toast:
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The pain that lost love can bring, makes you wish sometimes that you hadn't of loved at all. I hear what you're saying, deeply brought to the core.
     
  9. FINDLOVEINME

    FINDLOVEINME Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    YOU'RE READING A STRANGER SOUL, VERY GOOD PIECE.