Black Poetry : On The Money (hey yall please Critique This Piece)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MADDRAPPER, Jun 16, 2004.

  1. MADDRAPPER

    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On The Money (hey yall please Critique This Piece)

    Grants pardons and plant gardens with a *** and rake
    Plus flow great don’t know fake verse so take
    A chill pill tries thrill and kill microphones with scripts baked
    So its our occupation and obligation to rip you true so whose next?
    Can’t suck up all the corrupt and abrupt junk called funk and sex
    Chumps are complex with text but say nothing of worth
    I’m MADDRAPPER done a glad chapter now a new birth
    Look J-LO wears a halo and bounce from one man to the another
    Her plan is to smother marriages in a prenuptial her coo-chee is butter
    She stays incorrect like BEN AFLECK, panties PUFFY and fluffy
    Grooving smart with moving parts like a machine, leaving heads stuffy
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    in da raw tyte drop bruh fo real
     
  3. Sheryl D Martin

    Sheryl D Martin Active Member MEMBER

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    On The Money

    :hammer: Hey Poetic Brother that was truly a homerun because you put it down like it ought to be such as...Chumps are complex with text but say nothing of worth . Yet all the while they don't realize they're being pimped and played and eventually will fade and in all honesty...the people they serve truly won't give a **** because it's all about getting paid ! But one things for sure they better spend as much as they can before the curtain closes because where they're going...Cash Money won't be no more ! Feel Me ?
    In the eyes of this world...hoes will always score , but Heaven won't be their home...unless they clean their lifestyles up!

    One Love In All That's Real...Your Kansas City Connection !

    Sheryl aka CC
    Keep flowing My Brother because as long as you keep putting it down...I'll be taking notes ! ( Laugh ! ) :coffee:
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ok...

    I see a collab...in the making

    this piece was tyte and the add on from Cheryl...

    just made this thread an INFERNO :flamet:

    You two...need to do this again...

    This was tyte!
     
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    MADDRAPPER Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANKS FOR THE PROPS AND ALL THE INFO SPIT RIGHT HERE FOR REAL GUESS THIS HIT THE SPOT
     
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