Black Short Stories : On The Fringe Of Space

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  1. Earl

    Earl Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alarms are blaring loudly as the attack warning designators flash brightly. The enemy has launched an attack on the base. "What will we do?" So, thinks Captain Hakulon the commander of the Intergalactic ship the R.P.T.P.A.V.1. What will happen to me and my crew? If this base is destroyed where will we go? There are no star ports or any friendly planets in this galaxy to escape to. As he contemplates these thoughts. Explosions are erupting all around him. The door he was making his way to has been hit by an energy pulse. As it disintegrates he notices a Po’auchuur sapper team, a veteran one he notes. He watches them as they execute their mission by throwing irradiated incindary bombs all over the station. Captain Hakulon decides that it’s time for him to make his move, before the hull of the space station is breached. He pulls out his elkor pulse laser and begins picking off the enemy troopers. He kills two of the sapper team members long before they see him. As soon as the rest of the Po’aucchurrs see and hear their comrades fall, they quickly give the captain higher priority and fire away at him. Captain Hakulon decides that he’s pinned down and only fools stay in a fire fight that they can’t win. He pulls out a communicator and speaks into it. He says Captain to ship I need an Alpha priority transport immediately!!! Captain Hakulon fades out just as one of the Po’churrs breaks out a massive charge bag and throws it at him. Luckily, the ship is programmed not to beam up explosives during an alpha priority transport. The Po’churr sapper team is surprised as the immense charge bag bounces off the beam and right back at them. The last thing the sappers see and hear is a great big bang!!!!!
    Once, aboard his ship Captain Hakulon orders his crew to protect The Intergalactic fleets outpost. They try diligently but are extremely outnumbered. Intergalactic Command sends orders to all personnel. The orders say save yourselves carry on our mission and revenge what happened here today.
    Captain Hakulon calls a staff meeting. The attendees are The Executive Officer Lieutenant Commander Meldrick, The twin brothers Felts & Velts The ships gunners, Major Wam the Troop Commander, The intelligence Officer First Lieutenant stareater, The supply officer 2nd Lieutenant Jay, and the ships surgeon 2nd Lieutenant Stacy Everjoy.
     
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    i feel tha sci-fi vibe on this one
    nice prolouge...i liked the way
    you gave the names of the whole
    crew at the end...my brotha
    please continue....
    peace
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    nice pt. ll
    this was a story i like'd to read more of
     
  4. Earl

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    strange enough

    I've only wrote this part it has been about three years. I guess it's time to finish it. I already know some of the plot i just have to write it. Thanks for the encouragement.
     
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