Black Poetry : On some other ****

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SupaUgly, Aug 29, 2005.

  1. SupaUgly

    SupaUgly Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Aug 24, 2005
    Messages:
    15
    Likes Received:
    2
    Ratings:
    +2
    If I could change the past Would I at last Create a perfect future and

    redefine my destiny


    Would you think less of me If I put the people I care about lives in Jeopardy

    Just so I could be a well

    known Celebrity

    What if everything I thought was real is nothing more then an Illusion Am I

    causing more confusion

    Should I keep everything the same Or should I play this life like chess And

    try to think three moves

    ahead of you To win this game


    Are we praying to be forgiven Because we are living in Hell Incarcerated by

    these empty thoughts


    Has me serving life in jail

    Apocalypse is on the rise So why do I try to excel

    Why are we living to succeed


    Only dying to fail

    I’m not a pessimist But my suggestion is we look within are selves

    And find the true meaning of self love So we can replenish these dry wells.
     
  2. Poetrymama

    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jul 16, 2004
    Messages:
    633
    Likes Received:
    4
    Ratings:
    +6
    Re:Other

    Very nice play on words.
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    Yes, it does all start from within. I really liked the way you posed these words to the wise poet.
     
  4. Wisdom7

    Wisdom7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Aug 8, 2005
    Messages:
    577
    Likes Received:
    5
    Ratings:
    +7
    Supaugly that was Supanice!
     
  5. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jun 11, 2001
    Messages:
    7,648
    Likes Received:
    40
    Occupation:
    thrivin' spiritually/physically/emotionally/financ
    Location:
    where failure is not an option
    Ratings:
    +42
    this is what i'm talking about this is what poetry is to me
    real heartfelt mountain moving the way this piece moves mountain



    DSS
     
  6. Prizefighter16

    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Aug 14, 2004
    Messages:
    832
    Likes Received:
    18
    Ratings:
    +18
    i really enjoyed this vibe...gets me to :thinking:, and any piece that can boggle ones mind...is one i like to call the truth of its kind


    keep the flow goin brutha....


    bless

    word from Mz.soull aka prizefighter16
     
Loading...