Black Poetry : On miles on miles

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  1. rymjack5

    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    On miles on miles--he took his stick
    and walked on miles.

    Enchanted dazed and shivering
    screaming scared into the wind--
    his journey continues
    through the fire and the flood
    and the sandstorm.

    On miles on miles
    you took your stick
    and kept on walking.

    When you went--the weeping faces
    soaked the wood of the altar and pews
    while I stood dreaming
    no longer one
    but a violence of shards.

    On miles on miles
    I took his stick
    and kept on walking.

    The end is in the journey
    in the miles on miles
    of snowdrifts
    where one lone chimstack
    stands a'smoke
    with a strange meal on the table.

    The pains and the triumphs
    each face that we meet
    the end is in the cloudbank
    that cloaks the drifter
    and is his longing.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    rymjack you have great talent. Love the way you pose this - stunning.
     
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    suddenpassion Banned MEMBER

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    yes, very nice!! keep flowing
     
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    blaquebutterfli Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the end is in the journey -- profoundly beautiful
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!.......very nicely done
    miles of journey
     
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    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for the kind words and support. Thank you for telling me that I am not alone. I have nothing without the love and support of THE FAMILY.
     
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    this was nice very nice
     
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    profound rymjack5 :)
    tyte scribe :)
     
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    I truly sought to find the deepest meaning in this piece so I read it
    a few times, also because it was beautiful as well.........and I
    found symbolism of inner strength, life, companionship
    and as you so ably put it pain and triumph and much more...
    the wisdom in this piece is not only profound but the craftsmanship
    is to be revered................Beautiful Scribe R,jack!
     
  10. rymjack5

    rymjack5 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you mzblkangel and triniti424.

    And angelicsage thank you very much for for taking the time to read, re-read and offer an analysis. Your praise and encouragement means the world to me.
    Thank you!
     
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