Black Poetry : OLD FASHION STYLE

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  1. lilcherry76

    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    loves all lost,
    heart shattered into pieces.
    figure holds not its shape,
    goals intended to reach-never had i reached it.

    oh woe to me,
    and the one that wronged my right.
    that set ablaze upon me,
    once i was magnifed.

    eyes do swell,
    and mouth gape wide open.
    swings now empty,
    cement easily broken.

    long days and hours,
    holding on to what once was the time.
    rivers and mountains,
    constructing detour signs.

    never once had i glanced,
    to see beyond my knowing.
    but captured my well being,
    and then reaped my evil imp's sowings............
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    my my my !! u express it so well
    and how i felt u here continue on poetess
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    tight and felt it...
    your pen be on it
    continue on....
     
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    lilcherry76 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you both, it means alot coming from 2 great roots of poetry. i branch and bring forth leaves to show homage............thank you............one love...
     
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    indeed and unto u the same ya pen is sweet and mild
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LOVE the way you brought this! Feelin the sentiments, too. Gwan, gurl.
     
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    oh woe to me,
    and the one that wronged my right.
    that set ablaze upon me,
    once i was magnifed.

    eyes do swell,
    and mouth gape wide open.
    swings now empty,
    cement easily broken.

    ^^^^
    nice flow...words were carefully chosen i could see....you captured the vibe of this poem perfectly......holla at me,maybe we could get a collab going....ur style is hot.....1
     
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