Black Haiku : Oku #2

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  1. Scry'be

    Scry'be Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wanted to introduce my creation...the Oku, which is a derivative of a haiku but with the syllabic count 7634...hope you enjoy.




    i've been midnite tears, been blk
    moans against parted thighs,
    so i guess
    i'm just human.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I've been daylight of darkness
    hollow against open
    walls de ' well
    just a man thing
     
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    Scry'be Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i can gatha up yo pores
    and place smiles in yo tears-
    give me time-
    i'll kneel by u.


    yo thank you brutha RICH and yo you got the style down pat!!!!!!!!
     
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    He seduced her, willingly
    She opened to his smile
    Forgeting
    Miles between them

    Great style poet!
     
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    Scry'be Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you mami...


    we move'd 'gainst the tide of us-
    we sharpen ou'r eyesight
    leavin' past
    the past-we love!