Poetry Critiques : oh lord.....

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  1. nevar

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    oh lord i come before you cause thy enemies are at me feet
    i ask you to give me the strength to not fight but retreat

    restrain for taking one life in my own hands
    i must abide and obey your every commands

    my fellow brothers/sisters seem to not get what i'm saying
    leaving me to decay

    upon the very soil that all was made from
    lord i thankyou for the gift you given me
    to guard against any harm

    oh lord i stand before you with a solemn heart
    i look to you for guidance and not man's chart

    you taught me to love our neighbor our brother
    but to embrace the ones who gives life which is my father/mother

    i suffer so that i feel i cant go on
    but somehow you appear to me to hold on and be strong

    they didn't understand my son when he was on earth
    they persercuted him even throwed dirt

    at my only begotten son who purpose was to lay down his life for all
    mankind
    everything happen for a reason you'll see the true light in due time

    you must be steadfast, dilligent for my child i'm with you
    to get through the darkness, evil will be at you

    you must put on the armor that i'm providing
    dont let the devil get you or he will continue to riding

    upon everything that you believe in
    have you lusting for worldly things have you thinking he's your friend

    i tell you the devils a lie
    will leave you in a puddle of turmoil and a river of cries

    dont worry in due time people will see the light you carry
    some will be for you, against you its vary

    listen child remember that i'm always here
    and i'm in your heart so keep me near

    when the world seems to get you down
    with me your heavenly father i'll always be around

    and look one day i will make all things new
    and you would peer out to see all things are not blue

    and you would stand hopefully among the righteous and the unrighteous
    and i would judge all and each one if the want to show repentence

    for all the sins that were commited during your lifetime
    even if you stole, rob, kill or even committed a crime

    child cheer up through me only will you gain salvation
    all your ememies that are before you will end up damnation

    hold you head up now child for the angel of hope is at your becokning call
    to help you on your way and to pick you up from the fall

    and i say thank you lord for blessing, adressing me with your love
    i will continue to call on you and look for you above

    and i rose like a phoenix
    now that i got the meaning

    that my saviour, my lord, my heavenly father will always be around
    when i feel dispair..............
    oh lord
     
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    It's a sweet release, a prayer unto him
    very nice u don't need to change anything
     
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    to rich

    thankyou for your continuing support.
     
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    most welcome continue to express and share
     
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