Black Poetry : Off The Top

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by lpoet, Oct 23, 2002.

  1. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is just what i wrote when i was in here
    i guess you would call it a love poem?
    i dont know call it what u want like i said
    this is just how it flowed when i was in here


    Erratic erections
    lead to premature ejaculations
    And I’m passing
    Mind racing
    Trying to erase the pain I feel
    Don’t expect you to understand
    Cause its like
    How can you possibly understand the pain
    When you’ve never once had to stand in the rain
    And many nights I asked God
    What from these misfortunes could I possibly gain
    But despite the horrific pain in my heart
    That I sometimes feel I do know
    That my love for her is real
     
  2. halle24

    halle24 Active Member MEMBER

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    this like all of your stuff is great

    but i didnt like it how you told everyone that it was a love poem at the begining you should of just let them figure it out
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was beautiful keep scribing
     
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    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yessss... i would call that a love poem! & i
    liked it... very Very much!! thank you for
    sharin' your off the top!! :D

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
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    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    off the top?? lovin it just like that!
     
  6. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks everyone for the replys