Black Poetry : Off the Top (scribin)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by lpoet, Feb 19, 2002.

  1. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i wrote this while i was sitting on my computer a
    few minutes ago so dont be to hard on me.



    Erratic erections lead to
    premature ejaculations,
    And I’m pacing
    mind racing
    trying to let go the pain I feel
    don’t expect you to understand
    Because its like
    how can u understand the pain
    when you’ve never had to stand under the rain
    and many times
    I’ve asked god
    what from these misfortunes will I gain?
    so tired of
    rocking my brain
    with the stain of day to day life
    heartache and chest pains
    its like the same thing over and over again
    and all i can do is open my notebook
    and scribe with my pen
    and what would become of me
    if I could no longer write,
    I would probably become trapped in my thoughts
    and blinded by the light
    and despite of the horrific pain
    that I sometimes feel
    I know that my love
    for her is real
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i know that pain...

    intimately familiar with it...and i know it's hard to put it down.

    THANKS FOR SHARING.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    da love u scribe reside inside ya heart
    and surely she know by da look on ya face
    indeed if u can't write den darkness cast
    ova da room til ya mind clear and u flow
     
  4. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for showin the love
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LP.


    ...2 words.

    deeply felt.

    :heart:
    Elayne.
     
  6. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    real nice poet.

    hw
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LP....

    Kewl flow bro!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Poet,

    Deep & moving piece. Scribe On Poet!

    Poetically Turn'd Out!
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
  9. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    **** i didnt think this one would be felt as much as it is. thanks to all who replyed