Black Poetry : ODE to the Criminal

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  1. HODEE

    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You can’t walk anywhere without leaving a print.
    Touch my heart without leaving a dent.
    Come across carpet without creating static sparks.

    Cross the park grass without leaving your mark.

    So what makes you think?

    You can creep in the dark.
    Connections are like finger prints.
    Left for the investigation and to remind.
    You will be connected to the heart of the crime.

    So walk without leaving a dent.
    Think so that you won’t leave a hint.
    Cross the park without leaving a print.
    Connections are like finger prints.

    The smallest clue, can make and connect you.
    Build you leave you support
    and break you.

    So what I’m saying.
    I’ll have to report you.
    If you leave your mark.
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    5^ for you...however true, we all leave trademarks in life ...knowing and unknowingly. that was tight and I enjoyed reading it.
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow hodee nice and on point
    we all leave our prints fo real
    nice drop
    Peace
    Angel
     
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    thespokesman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    its sad for criminals who got locked up and turn thier life around and still feel hatred
    thats why u should never [put yourself in that situation
    especially in america
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked the crafty way you went about this, yes we all leave our imprints however small.
     
  6. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hmmm...Brother Hodee

    "Another Masterpiece"....

    I'm always anxious when I see

    you've blessed us with a new piece

    and once again...

    You've exceeded my expectations...

    Cleverly written, great imagery, captivating...

    but most of all..."teaching"... :bowdown:
     
  7. afrostotle

    afrostotle Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Havent read you in awhile.....DAAAAYYYUMM!!! I been sleeping...Nothing personal, as you are alwayz on point....I loved this to the point of being in tears over a situation to which this applies....Sometimes we have to check those we love the most...........One love
     
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