Black Poetry : Ode to Siren

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  1. Siren

    Siren Active Member MEMBER

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    Ode to Siren

    On the salty cool breath of a Monsoon’s eve
    The echoes of your whispers are still carried to me
    And my heart rebels
    but my mind slightly starts to concede
    And from my mouth unto the earth my song of woe is received
    As it travels from the air, throughout the deeps of my leagues

    Last night I dreamt of you, and yet still I believed
    That you were immaculately carved to exist only for me
    How naive?
    From upon my seas ....
    Still I called to thee...
    An alluring and enchanting melody....
    Even as dawn beckoned a new day to be
    Lighting the ocean exposing all of me
    Way down to the marrow of what “I” be

    Like Indie Arie the, “Ready for love,” feeling takes over me
    As all I can do is pray you, “Say Yes,” like Floetry
    You’re in my veins like a brand new drug to me
    With cravings stronger than heroin could ever be
    My mind keeps going back to thoughts of, “we”
    Which brings my mind to sensual thoughts of “he”
    And drags my mind to impassive thoughts of “she”
    But moreover my partial intrusion
    No exposition needed to further delusions
    Trust I’m thoroughly versed in this short story’s conclusion

    And yet my receptors continue to scan
    Where they just adjectives, verbs, and nouns from a decent man
    Faded memories, and dreams influence decisions
    That’s got my heart in stuck in this same position
    Like a car with a blown up transmission
    A final checkmate, or fatal vehicular collision

    Of what I want, and what in my heart I know is to be
    At first sight, I was especially drawn to thee.....
    As the alluring mariner, I called you from the ship to my seas
    As I moaned your name upon a lonely seductive breeze

    Like a moth to a flame
    Like a sunflower craves rain
    But realistically the truth remains
    What I desire whole-heartedly
    Is something in this lifetime, that could never be
    Truth be told we are in two different nautical leagues.

    So skip straight to the credits on this love story
    It ends with all guts, and no passionate glory
    It always makes me sad
    And wish for what she had
    But no need to stay mad
    Cause we’ll keep meeting every night on that astral plane
    Dipping in and out of my sensual and sexual dreamscape
    As Erykah Badu keeps singing in the background
    About a love that didn’t work this time around

    And to my oceans I will flee
    And in my dreams I will see
    What I wish was to be
    And to my waters I will weep
    My song will run deep
    And be my ode to thee
    As sorrows will sweep
    Across every sea
    And reach every league
    All of eternity
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Beautifully laid out just for me
    through da depth of ya soul i see
    while thy love has taken over thee
    last night i dreamth of you
    like da starz of the northern glow
    my heart flooded with wishies

    In my song i sing as it echos abound
    resoundly to earth floors as da sea dance
    for your arrival the waves whisper ya name
    softly in melodies devine
    only my ears hear thee from da air mass
    ready for love to be loved by you

    Rainbowz a glow from da showers of summer
    as the shores weep in da bandonment
    the skies rumble and clash in perfect view
    what was i thinking , as i let me heart stumble
    again by the mere of ya crisp sound
    when reality it wasn't about me but you


    I really enjoyed this piece you really brought out da depth in it wow
    it just kiss me and wrap around me ya pen is powerful sista.

     
  3. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    man

    i don't have the words you know

    all i can offer is "the pain killer" here

    i felt this in the depth of my soul

    i can appreciate this

    the what if's

    i learned long ago

    to let go don't let it fog the focus what is, is

    peace um

    did i say i felt this already

    :bowdown:
     
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    Ooooh-weee!

    I am just BASKING and REVELING in all the sensuality and romance and intimate reflection in this piece, Siren!

    This was like sinking into a warm bubble bath!




    And Rich:

    Your piece was such a compliment and complement to hers! You two should do a piece together!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Exquisitely written, this had a "dreamy" feel on the one hand as you spoke of the beauty of what if, and the pain on the other hand, because it never will be. Awesome expression with a great flowback from Rich.
     
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    WOW :cry:

    Okay you had me from the...
    ...on this one sister siren :read:

    The last verse was so melodically painful and soothing in the way that it relates to anyone whos been let down by love or the expectations of love

    Bravo sister :terrific: bravo :) cant wait to read more :read: :)
     
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    Siren,

    I love the creative flava this poem brings, it flows so well. Great write!

    epiphany:heart:
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I felt like I was living it as I read it, the words feel so fresh and real ...your art is amzing sis.
     
  9. Siren

    Siren Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanks

    Thanks everyone! I really appreciate it! :hi:
     
  10. Khasm13

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    the sailor outmaneuvered the siren?
    u don't see that too often....
    nevertheless this was a great write...
    flow on....

    one love
    khasm
     
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