Quiet Poetry Lounge : Ode to an Old Friend for CJ

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Caesarlee31, Aug 20, 2004.

  1. Caesarlee31

    Caesarlee31 Active Member MEMBER

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    :lol: the fifth movement :lips:
    Rain on me,
    Wash away the years of lying and denying
    About the way I feel inside,
    Cleanse me, With your love and new day,
    I’ll promise the world
    And I will give my last breath.

    Rain on me,
    So that what you feel
    Saturates my very being,
    Covering all of the little holes
    That causes dysfunction
    And suffocation from the stench
    Left by lovers who had no business
    Ever being lovers. :hammer:

    Rain on me
    For your love is like a shower,
    My confessions could heat
    Cold sarcasm could not invade
    And I love you is not a factor :luvv: .
     
  2. Caesarlee31

    Caesarlee31 Active Member MEMBER

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    This is a nine year old poem that I wrote and I found in my mother's basement :jumping: read through it.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    good true treasures always in the basement or attic tuck away
    i love tis piece
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very nice no matterhow old it is..i likes this
    thanks for sharing it with us
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wanting old feelings to be washed away for new. A scribe like this will always read like a classic.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    nine years old or yesterday...the metaphor of rain/water
    the ritual concept of cleansing
    is now...today...forever
    very nice..and thanks for sharing it..
     
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    awwwwwwww I likes
     
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