Black Poetry : obvious obsession

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  1. chaos

    chaos Member MEMBER

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    Hey everyone...here's a piece i'd like to share.

    I'm tired of thinking about you
    You're just too incessant in my mind
    I can't even wake up without having a sense of you
    Surrounding me
    Drowning me in your tranquillity
    But why are you so calm?
    Are you oblivious of my fixation of you?
    My clear obsession of your total existence
    Ignorance is bliss I see
    My mind is stuck in this mental asylum
    Constricted to only your quiet presence
    Bound in thought endless
    While you're never knowing
    Never showing any concern
    Dayum, can I be loose from your hold on me?
    Be free
    Can my dome be empty from thoughts of you?
    Be easy
    Can I live in my ageless fantasy?
    Enjoy life's pleasantries
    Lay back
    Without distractions of your fashions of apathy?
    This can never happen
    No, not at all
    I will always stay doused in you
    My every manner has to involve you
    You're just too vital
    So necessary for me to be
    My placid, powerful control
    Time
    My obvious obsession
     
  2. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh i love this
    feeling the melody
    wonderful
    wonderful
    Peace
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes this...
    wonderful write...
    please flow on...:angel1:
     
  4. chaos

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    Thank you Bluewater and mzblkangel for the love. :D
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nice scribe wow !!! almost missed this flava here
     
  6. chaos

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    thanks rich :rolling:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed bring more of this here
    flow me some mo of dis flava u pose
    it's awesome scribing of ya pen
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is the only kind of obsession that can be categorized as

    "Wonderful"....

    thanks for sharing such beauty...
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    can't even wake up without having a sense of you
    Surrounding me
    Drowning me in your tranquillity

    Your words definitely capture the spirit of obsession. Very nice read.
     
  10. Chastity

    Chastity Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    REAL nice..........loving it.....maybe also because I can relate....to having my mind consumed with the very essence of someone who doesn't even know what is going on

    But I love it tho.
     
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