Black Poetry : observerance pt.1

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i sat across from him
    sipping a cup of coffee
    watched the sugar/cream
    swirl together and cancel
    each other out...
    i watched words
    dribble out the side of his mouth
    and he spoke
    in a sweet southern drawl
    that made me sweat....

    i looked at his cheekbones
    high hinting at Indian origin
    the way he licked his lips....
    so lusious, and full,
    i drowned in the lines on his brow,
    showing some tormenting
    thought gnawing at his cerebellum,

    his skin glistened in the morning sun,
    which seemed to play peek-a-boo
    in and out the clouds...

    his words tapped on the
    hardwood table
    a long term morse
    that only i could decode

    i was caught up in him....
    he licked up his ice cream
    making me think of lewd
    things that steamed me up
    and made celestial beings
    envy me.....

    he was perfection....

    to be continued....

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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    i eagerly await the continuation..
    you have a wonderful talent...keep honoring it...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well done continue the gift of da pen !!
     
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    goodness gurl you are too skilled for words :)
     
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    Excellent read, please, do go on...
     
  6. the_story

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    yes, im glad u all liked it, i shall continue....
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    yo are you really fourteen?! :jawdrop:
    l'm too shocked at the skillz..

    *reading on*
     
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    Nice that was excellent.....it was da :bomb:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall glad u liked it...
    (p.s....jhiah, yeah i get that alot...lol)
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