Black Poetry : ...O-O-Okay...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Mar 24, 2004.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a song i wrote...based on my close friend who was almost killed by her husband, she was in a verbally abusive relationship...

    Chorus:

    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    okay

    Verse 1:

    so many years i tried to pull away
    so many tears have flooded down my face
    all those torturing and dominating things you said
    i thought i needed you to survive and level out my head
    and every command you desired i fulfilled
    tearing me inside and i just couldn't take it
    instead of lashing out i just replied simply
    i dropped my eyes and said to you so quietly


    Chorus:

    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    okay

    Verse 2:

    I thought about hittin you I even picked up a knife
    but then i stopped myself and thought of takin my own life
    i couldn't understand what i ever even did
    to deserve all this pain, my life seems shortlived
    and all i could do was drop my eyes to the ground
    take all the pain, oh so true, make this pain my own
    I stood quietly for so [email protected] long
    But all i did was say

    Chorus:

    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    okay


    Bridge:

    So how could ou do this to me?
    How could you dominate me?

    Don't wanna see you
    i can't stand you
    I don't need you oh no oh no...

    But first all i said was say

    Chorus:

    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    o-o-okay
    okay

    ((fade out))
     
  2. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ...please pray for her....hope u enjoyed the song...
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i guess nobody wanted to read this....but if u do...hope u like it...and maybe you can learn somethin' from it...
     
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    my goodness sister
    very deep the songs
    of scribe indeed
    much love:grouphug:
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  5. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it's not that nobody wanted to read this...I think that most felt the pain as I do...

    I hope that she meditate long and hard to find that her :crying: days are or should be ...behind her, and open herself up for real :love:
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    naw gurl this was tyte :)
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You posed this in such a way that the ache just shows. Such a sad situation. Emotively written.
     
  8. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks everybody:)
     
  9. mistaliberator

    mistaliberator Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very beautiful

    this poem really helped me realize how a woman really feel when shes trapped
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nobody do it like u
    nOOOOOOBodyyyyyy!!!
    love it sang to me anytime u like
    tyte
     
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