Black Poetry : now yall know who i once was (the_story's story..) Parental Advisory

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Apr 15, 2004.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she was her own person
    her body was every mans church...
    she would indulge in lewd act for the acceptance of others...
    so tht somehow her tears would be washed away...
    she would drive those ****** wild...
    they loved the way she walked,
    the way she moved....
    they said her ***** was good...
    didn't matter as long as she got what she wanted....

    drugs would temporarily numb her pain....
    and she would sniff....inhale...smoke...
    anything...they would call her
    The Street *****/***...she would
    cry from those names...

    out of her mouth uttered many words of hate...
    cursing was a common as breathing for this girl....
    like breathing was to lyfe...

    she would bitter soo **** u mother******
    came naturally out of her mouth
    she used to hate herself....
    she new her soul was lost,
    till God sought redemtion for her
    in the form of a mighty man in the church....

    that night she found salvation for a while...
    untill she started sliping again...
    then she was dead to the world yet again...
    still callin people dumb *** mother******s ***** *** hoes...
    she didn't know anyother words...

    she hated the way she acted...
    she was obnoxious...a angry *****
    that fed off of people's happiness hoping it
    would rub off on her....

    she was the imbodiment of ignorance....

    (well people this is the way i was...it was...crazy....i had serious issues...but then i changed....God kept tugging at my heart....sooooo, i got back on track,back with god, i can only hope that i stay there...)
    holla...
    -story

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  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nice drop but little foul on words
    sistah try not using so many to express
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was nice story
    posed well
     
  4. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall...sorry rich i'll keep that in mind...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    My little sister in poetry...
    This was raw.
    I like the way you put every emotion into showing us the old you.
    I thank God for the maturity in this piece!
    Growing up and changing is not easy.
    But God is with you.
    I love your work so much.
    God bless.


    PEACE AND LOVE
    twision
     
  6. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the words twision...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes

    madd raw, but sometimes that's how the truth comes..in RAW form..nie drop story :shades:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks nita..i appreciate it...
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    my heart reach out to you..my dear sister, you release what once was into the wind..and i can not help but cry a bit, because you are so specail and we all do truly love you, as we pray for the best for you, flow your flow...release it dear sister,you do know your worth and you indeed shine with a strenght that grows more each pasting day
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  10. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awww...thanks blu water for the encouraging words..i'm glad u liked my flows..
    :heart:
    -story
     
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