Black Poetry : ...Nothing of Mine...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LovelyGoldenOne, Feb 15, 2005.

  1. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is a song i've just been workin on...its not really done yet, i just want some feedback on it...

    Nothing of Mine:

    Verse 1
    Confused in my own mind
    The more I seek I don’t find
    The more I think, I hide
    And I cant take no more of this cuz I
    I don’t understand
    Why God has such a plan
    Where when I happy I get hurt
    So now I just wait for the worst

    Chorus
    I’m just caught in this one state of mind that makes me relive all dreadful times
    when I hurt and you lurked and you weren’t no friend, nothing of mine
    you deceived me down to wet hot tears, but I’ve learned from myself over the years
    when I hurt and you lurked and you weren’t no friend, nothing of mine

    Verse 2
    Confused in my own head
    And I just don’t get it
    My heart says I am leanin towards you
    And I’m tryin to pull away
    Cant give it up no more
    I did, he shut his door
    Leavin me to dwell on the past and think it wont last more than tonight
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this was tyte so far and it's on chorus
    like the flow on it and the tune of the song
    i played it in my head .......do complete it !!
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks so much rich:)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    most welcome sista Queen
    do yo thing now !
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a tune many can relate to. Continue the flow.
     
  6. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks again rich and watz:)
     
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    very nice enjoyed the flow/song i likes it
     
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    It's tight Lovely. My God bless in persuing your dreams sweetie. How are you doing nowadays anyways? Hit me up on my yahoo messenger
     
  9. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the comments everybody...i'll be sure to do that swtt:)
     
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