Poetry Critiques : Notes to a Lover

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  1. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My dear sweet lover,
    Oh how I wish you were mine?
    'Cause there are many...
    Fantasy thoughts going through my mind,
    And they all are centered around the essence of you...
    Just the thought makes me be filled with a hunger,
    For your loving burning touch,
    I thirst for your sweetness so badly,
    Not just now but till the end of time,
    I am waiting for you with open arms
    To embrace you with wings of love,
    To hold you deep within my soul,
    To kiss you without control.
    Just being near you,
    And be able to behold your touch,
    Takes me to another dimension,
    But, time just moving so slowly,
    To feel the heat of your passions.
    I do want you to know...
    "I love you" is on the tip of my tongue
    For you are what I've longed for,
    And craved, and yearned...
    Possibly, you are the answer to a prayer
    That one awesome man of my dreams,
    The one I patiently waited to show up the door,
    But for now, all I know is that every day, more and more,
    I'm think I'm falling deeply in love with you!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    nicely expressed of a sweet note to a lover
    try to break this into a few stanza ............
     
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