Black Poetry : Not sure how to use this system, so, here is one of my poems..tell me what u think..

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  1. Lady-Intellect

    Lady-Intellect New Member MEMBER

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    What is this feeling?
    I just cannot describe it
    It`s a mixture of emotions
    And theres no way to deny it
    Not enough words to really express how I feel
    It`s much deeper than thoughts..more than being real
    In order to understand.
    Just exactly how I feel
    I go into a defined mental state
    And dig down inside, this plate of cold steel
    Been down so many paths and taken turns that lead astray
    Not close enough to my heart
    This is the problem with my life today
    No matter where I go
    No matter who I meet
    It seems that everytime I try to get close to them
    It`s just not close enough for me
    I feel so deeply, that I would live inside a soul that love me
    I need so badly that I would do anything to save a burned heart
    I give so easily my love, that its taken advantage of
    Yet, to find out the true meaning of all of my intentions
    Some things are better left unsaid
    In cases I find this is true
    But, in my case If I hide it any longer
    It will harden my heart, leaving it ice cold, blue
    Spirits awaken my nights
    A misty breeze will blanket my face
    A rememberance of what I once was
    Is a feeling I wouldn`t wanna trace
    But, to come forth into this reality
    And to let my light shine brightly
    And to not worry, for the others sake
    Instead love me for me
    All I want is to hold a heart
    Directly Inside of my hand
    To wish and gaurantee a treasure thats true
    Beyond any want or demand
    Take this as I offer my mind up to you
    So that you can see a deeper part of me
    One that you can understand
    Instead of guessing at what you can`t see
    In all honesty, this is the best
    Far greater than what I expected
    To love and to be loved
    And no longer feel rejected


    :heart:
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow!!!
    Welcome to Destees!!!

    :wave: :wave: :wave:
    You are a very talented writer :) Hoep to see more from you soon:D
     
  3. Da1whoownslife

    Da1whoownslife Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Oh h*ll yes...... This piece was the bomb...... I loved this...... Keep them coming........ and keep your head up like the Tupac Shakur.....
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome to destee.com poetic playground
    welcome from above as i bless u dis love
    this was awesomely well pose'd
    ya pen has much depth look to read more of you
     
  5. Lady-Intellect

    Lady-Intellect New Member MEMBER

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    Thank you soo much for the love everyone! It really does mean alot to me.... hey, can someone point me in the direction of how to manage my profile? Not really sure...
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: Welcome to Destee's

    Deep piece...
    Thanks for sharing.

    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
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    :wave: 'sup welcome to destee's place hope u like it here.:)
    much luv
    -story
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:
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    WELCOME Lady-Intellect

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    I hope u keep comin wit all this knowledge of yours :)
     
  9. Lady-Intellect

    Lady-Intellect New Member MEMBER

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    The movement, the sweating, the illicit affair.
    I love every minute of it, I swear.
    The moment that I cannot wait to start.
    Even after hours I don’t want our bodies to part.
    The foreplay, it can happen with my body or in my mind.
    Makes me want to leave all the other hours of the day behind.
    I envision our bodies tangled, it makes me so hot.
    The constant want to make love to you, is the feeling I’ve got.
    The electricity we create, heat and passion on the rise.
    You tempt me, tease me. I can’t wait to get you between my thighs.
    To see your beautiful body, glistening with sweat, is all so fine.
    To have my hands upon you every moment, it is simply divine.
    Your hands on my body, using only your fingertips.
    Brings me to the point where no words, only moans, escape my lips.
    You run the your fingers down the entire length of my spine.
    You lick and taste my body’s juices like they are a fine wine.
    You bring me to the point of ecstasy, god it’s taste so sweet.
    You are the woman that satisfies all of me, this is no easy feat.
    To make love to me this way, it has to be a crime.
    But if a crime it is with you my love, I will do the time.
    When all is over, you sweetly plant on my lips a beautiful kiss.
    Our bodies are exhausted, but still filled with pure bliss.
    We drift off to sleep, bodies together, fitting like a glove.
    We dream about another time to express the meaning of our love.
     
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    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WELCOME!!! This is tyte, I like the way ur words just flowed so well, keep em comin....
     
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