Black Poetry : Not finished could someone add an ending and a title

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by blakverb, Apr 2, 2001.

  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the gift she bore was something
    you'd see in a display case with
    the word "Priceless" across the front
    never to be bought never to be sold
    just given to the right one the write
    man who could hold the planets for
    her when she needed the break cause she
    is the queen of the universe spinning
    stardust into illustrious cloths and
    placing them over cold regions of the
    world to keep the troubled warm /
    and the lonely is not so lonely for she is
    happiness unquestioned / but I wondered
    why God placed her here before me bearing
    gifts...her extended hand exposed this
    PRICELESS gift and it glowed an amethyst
    hue...it beat syncopated with the chimes
    of the stars she wore around her neck and
    smelled of chamomile simmering...intoxicating
    me until I was relaxed and flowed through
    her fingers like chocolate ice cream in June
    ...she extended her heart to me...



    (c)2001 blakverb and ?
     
  2. Ms_MochaB

    Ms_MochaB Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My Queen ... A Priceless Gem

    I accepted ... I wanted to hold her as my prized
    possession but she showed me that it didn't matter
    where we were her presence is always near me ...
    So she held me closely with her words ... with the
    movement of her lips ... I did accept ... I accepted not change the power that she had within ... It was then I learned the value of my PRICELESS gem
     
  3. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    pure platinum material....

    that's the title....
     
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    she extended her heart to me...

    precious and caring
    bearing fruits of many blessings
    as rivers of deep emotions
    coursed through the valley
    of many sorrows...bringing
    light and warmth to all who
    beheld this beautiful QUEEN
    as she sat on her throne
    at the center of the universe.
    yes...
    she extended her heart to me
    but i was too intoxicated...
    drunk with the essence of the
    incandescent light show
    emitted from a heart glowing
    bright with PURETY
    and all i could see was
    all i wanted to see
    yes,
    ...she extended her heart to me.
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Blak~

    I don't have any words that could
    begin to finish this Priceless Prose
    that you are working on ~
    a title-- well so many come to my mind;
    but then again, this is your piece...
    I'd rather see just what words you would
    use to tie this all together - because
    it's simply beautiful, simply wonderous...
    an unbelievable/believable Blakverb "creation", a fitting
    description for a Noble BLAK KING (you are)!!
     
  6. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I racked my brain for a title,
    but it's already priceless - i don't want
    my 2 cents to ruin it - LOL - .
     
  7. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Well

    N2urSoul has spoken my sentiments. This is outstanding ~ I sit and await what YOUR soul dictates.

    Thank you for what you be doin up in heah!

    A
     
  8. pztvnrg

    pztvnrg Active Member MEMBER

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    it's done baby
    add
    simply because i needed it
    and your title is

    'YOU GIVE'...
     
  9. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Call it "Priceless" and im sure one of these beautiful blak sistas on the page will finish it fa you dog... or you could just leave like it is! top notch!

    Madd Respect
    Reas
     
  10. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she gave priceless or something off like that.
    it is finished, though, sweety.
    -7
     
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