Black Poetry : Not 2day, but 2morrow

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  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she gave me the news
    the truth was revealed
    somebody put their feet
    in the shoes I couldnt fill
    not once, but twice
    b4 she let me go
    must've been nice
    bcuz she went back for more
    I could've been trife
    and bring tears to her eyes
    but it'd only cause more strife
    and 2 wrongs dont make a right
    and even though my soul is crying
    and im slowly dying
    i tell myself im gonna be alright...

    maybe not 2day, but 2morrow
    im gonna take a bite of reality
    and swallow my sorrow
    she's gonna wake up n call my name
    but I wont follow
    i cant do it 2day, so maybe 2morrow

    she had the nerve to break it down to me
    gave me a list of reasons
    she said she lost what she found in me
    that it changed with the seasons
    she gave me the "its not u, its me" speech
    she said she needed her space
    but i didnt need to hear her preach
    we both know she made a mistake
    so she walked out that door
    and locked my heart
    although, i know i deserve more
    she was still the moon, the sun, n the stars
    i probably could find somebody on the rebound
    but id only be fooling myself
    1st i need to find solid ground
    b4 i fly off the shelf
    so for the time being, i tell myself im gonna be alright...

    maybe not 2day, but 2morrow
    im gonna take a bite out of reality
    and swallow my sorrow
    shes gonna wake up n call my name
    but i wont follow
    i cant do it 2day, so ill start 2morrow

    *shakes my head* ive told myself for 4 months....
    not 2day, but 2morrow
     
  2. true love

    true love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "she gave me the "its not u, its me" speech"

    i hate that speech too...i know how you feel heartbreak has got to be the worse pain the world. much love to you and yes i was really really feeling this flow.
     
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    If I were anymore in tune with your emotions that emulate from
    this piece....it would be my words...
    I loved the way you brought this...the filling of the shoes, the
    not today but tomorrow...the it's not u - it's me speech...
    this is a lonely and paiful road...I wished I didn't have the
    unpleasantry of knowing...

    You really worked this piece girl!
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    So many many good lines. Like this:

    so she walked out that door
    and locked my heart

    and this:

    she's gonna wake up n call my name
    but I won't follow


    This is really beautiful, lil sis. Very very well-put. And it reflects some growth and healing on your part. I'm proud of you.
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    emotional flow...i'm feelin' this...
     
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    nice flow
     
  7. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree wit gempis...the past has changed the present you have grown my sista...may healing grace your hearts doorstep.
     
  8. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awwww thanks yall. You make me feel all important and what not. Thanks again...
     
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    ouch:(...im really feeling this piece gurl...but i always like your pieces:)
     
  10. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aww thanks girl. I always like yours too.
     
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